Eleven eleven

word mining doesn't always lead to word finding

I wish

 upon the stars 

that I had the words

 I want 

to write to you.

Words which you 

deserve 

And yet something

tells me - I have all the words

I'll ever need 

for this Life.

They reside in me

but they scurry 

away

into the dark

and hide when I 

reach for them

because they too feel

unworthy 

of you.

Author's Note

ignore grandma problems ;p

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Theres so many words in all different languages but the language of Love never seems to reveal its vocabulary, how do you express the emotion that you feel inside? The emotion that isn't even an emotion itself, for you feel happiness, sadness, anger, frustration, complete joy and many others. Love is a mystery, so what is the solution? Taking the highest possible equivalence and hoping that they feel the same... on the other side of love. This is beautiful

[Tony Jordan]

I agree with all you said Drift.
Real love - makes you sick with all those mixing emotions - no wonder the words get either stuck or vommed up in the wrong order !
Thank you for reviewing this one my friend.
:)

[Papaya]

I think this is super Tony. Full of love.
I wonder why we hide it sometimes.
I would bet that she (or he) would really appreciate your words more than any other gift you might give.
Very good poem.

[Tony Jordan]

Maybe one day she ill Ana. Maybe one day...
Thank you very much for your visit and kind review.
I really appreciate it.
:))

[Tony Jordan]

*will not ill - lol

[Papaya]

You're welcome. :)

[Tony Jordan]

:) x 100...

[Bala Gorthi]

This is just amazing. But those words couldn't stop from coming out for us through this write.
A nice piece of writing.
And I loved this line: word mining doesn't always lead to word finding.
Very well put.

[Tony Jordan]

I'm honoured Bala. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this one.
I appreciate your visit greatly. :)

[Manu]

Very very true, Tony.
We may have thousand splendid words stored in this intelligent mind but we do fall short of words when we are in front of that one special person.
Words seem nothing because feelings overpower them. Expression of love through caring attitude and behavior is much more important than spoken words. I guess it is eyes and heart that do the speaking then.

Beautiful writing :-)
Keep it up, Tony.

[Tony Jordan]

"Expression of love through caring attitude and behavior is much more important than spoken words... " - well said Gorthi.
Thank you my friend.
:))

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

This one is quite moving, emotionally speaking...

What a tender declaration of love, full of tenderness .

Sweet, very sweet indeed.

Wishing you well.

Alisa ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Hey - glad to see you back!
Thank you very much for your lovely review.
Ditto on the wishes my dear friend.
:))

[Valentine]

So much said in so few words. Not just to a special someone but also to family and friends. Valentine

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you very much Kathie.
:)

[Ken Simm.]

What a marvellous concept. That the words hide from you. I just love the whole idea of that.
They remind me of the wee meeses that live in my loft during the winter. They all wear wee kilts, string vests and wee bonnets. Together with Doc Martin's and they have regular wee celidhs and say Crivens! a lot.
However back to this. I can empathise totally. We do have words that we want to say but the reason for why we don't are manifold. To lovers, family, friends. It reaches the supreme apex when we sit keyboard or quill in hand and chew them over literally. I am really aware of the irony here where you write about not being able to find the words. Tremendous and quite moving stuff. Now if I can learn to stop chewing my keyboard. Its not smart and its not funny.

[Tony Jordan]

Too funny Ken - hobnail boots sporting kiltified vermin having a ceili. Kill those meeses to pieces. I think our Mr Dadd has been looking over your shoulder. I'll expect a new painting 'The Hairy fellers masterblaster disco'.

Tis sad that we have feelings that are too big for the words to fit into. Muffin tops lol.
Thanking you for your resting here for a while Sir.

[Ken Simm.]

Now there is an idea for a painting.

[Tony Jordan]

Don't do it Ken!
Nurse !!!
We're going to need considerably stronger medication...

[Ken Simm.]

Why? Some cretin did dogs playing poker. Go on let me.....

[Tony Jordan]

haha - lmao
love those dogs - and playing pool too ...haha

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, "grandma problems"

oh can i relate...i have felt such strong emotions...towards lovers, friends...family...and when trying to put the pen to those emotions...
the words come out smeared with inappropriate strength to match those feelings...

j.

[Tony Jordan]

smeared - exactly Jacob. Very well said my friend. Thank you.
:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I can relate to this. Sometimes "words fail" infront of the person you want to say them to.. You turn speechless..
This is the saddest piece I've read of you, Tony! But it's beautifully so..
On a funnier note, what's the connection of the poem and the title? The title reminded me of the novel "Eleven Minutes" iykwim 😂😂😂
I liked reading this btw ☺👍

[Tony Jordan]

It is sad when we cannot put the words and feelings together and the holy grail of writers I guess, Key.
When I was a little crazy in the head haha, I felt that 11:11 on the digitial clock was a time that my life was going to alter beyond recognition one day.
It never happened.
I wrote this in about a minute this morning and happened to look at the clock and it was 11:11 so it was the time of birth of this write lol.
I got over my obsession with 11:11 a long time ago (as you can see...lol)
Thank you Key, I appreciate your visit very much.
:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting idea! Of giving the title at the time of its birth.. If I did that, most of my work would be like one fifteen or most probably seven ten lol😂😂😂
Oh sorry, you're welcome, always ☺

[Tony Jordan]

Hah !! You never sleep Key. Are you an A.I. robot? You have to tell me - its in your programming ...:D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha sleep doesn't come easily to me.. Insomnia 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

I've been there. It's not nice. (hugs)
Music was the Key ;p, to my salvation. I go through quite a few headphone sets while I fight with the mattress; battling the forces of hell in my night-horror filled sleep but hey ho, it's sleep...lol
I'd recommend something soothing not death metal

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha even my playlist of 20-30 songs end lol.. Don't worry a book is probably the best way to get me sleeping these days 😂😂 course books 😛
I appreciate the "fatherly" hugs though 😉 *hugs back*

[Tony Jordan]

Fatherly !!
They were brotherly !! lmao
Textbooks are always a good sedative. I concur. haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha brotherly accepted as well 😛
Yeah even the sight of 'em makes me sleepy lol

[Tony Jordan]

zzzzzzzzzzzzzz.............*wakes up*
sorry you were saying?
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol go back to sleep 😛😂

[Tony Jordan]

read more (course books)...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I don't laugh that much Tony! Ouch even my jaws hurt 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

take out the mouth gag then !! Stealing equipment from work is a sackable offence !

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha you know people so steal here in the hospital? The surgical gloves😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

I worked in a hospital Key, its in the job description to pilfer lol.

what about the surgeons gowns at Halloween for zombie doctor outfits !! lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha that's crazy 😛😂

[Tony Jordan]

**DISCLAIMER**
I do not condone kleptomania at any of the health outlets in the UK

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'll bear this in mind when I come there 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Yeah steal all you can on the way haha or just wait and steal it here but don't mention me.
xD

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol haha thank you for the advice, Tiny.. Oh sorry Tony 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Ooh ya wee biatch... Tiny indeed...
that's mad .!!

[Tony Jordan]

Hhaah - I love it...
Bravo - well played Key.
xDD

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I was about to say tiny wee lad 😉 but just tiny is rad too 😂😛

[Tony Jordan]

I hope people dont get the wrong idea. haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha took me whole day to come up with that 😂😂

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yeah coz you aren't tiny to be exact while I maybe the key to someone's heart😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - too funny Key, too funny.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol someone is getting irritated now 😂😂😂
So little patience,m'boy? Too bad.. Seems as if I should stop now 😂😛

[Tony Jordan]

😂😂😂 laughing here.
m'boy - thats class ...your the dentist you have all the patients

[Tony Jordan]

(see what I did there) haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha I don't treat my patients this way 😂 I'll be in for a hell of a thing if I did 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Give me the gas - give me the gas - I've had enough - lmao
Key I think you'll be very good to your patients - hit over the head with a mallet then bury them -I want half of their gold teeth. Partners me and you...70-30 to me

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha! Just bury? I've a lot in my mind more than that😉😂
Oh sorry to break it for you but gold teeth are out of the league now so it ain't gonna be business now 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

What - no more gold fillings? What will they use? It has to be airport scanner-proof. Dont want to be bleeping-well bleeping at the bleeping airport for bleeps sake !!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well mostly it's just the tooth coloured material.. Do you really want to know the mechanics of it? 😂 coz I don't feel like explaining 😛

[Tony Jordan]

Nah don't bother , I was just pretending to be interested - manipulating you like...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha I know you were 😉

[Emilia Cole]

this describes me on many different levels except I always have something to say it's just never the right words

[Tony Jordan]

Does that make things awkward for you - I mean do you say things that are inappropriate or just things that fall short of what you wanted to say Emilia?
Im interested...
Thanks for reviewing this one. :))

[Emilia Cole]

yeah sometimes

[Jimmy Yetts]

Eleven eleven--a supposedly momentous number.
Your poem represents a powerful statement of the highest regard.
Somehow, Tony, you did find the words.
Impressive!

[Tony Jordan]

Yes Jimmy - 11:11 always felt like an important time during the day but I never did figure why.
read moreYes Jimmy - 11:11 always felt like an important time during the day but I never did figure why.
I found the words to speak of how I can't find the words - ironic (as Ken said).
Thank you my friend !!