Eleven eleven

word mining doesn't always lead to word finding

I wish

 upon the stars 

that I had the words

 I want 

to write to you.

Words which you 

deserve 

And yet something

tells me - I have all the words

I'll ever need 

for this Life.

They reside in me

but they scurry 

away

into the dark

and hide when I 

reach for them

because they too feel

unworthy 

of you.

Author's Note

ignore grandma problems ;p

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Theres so many words in all different languages but the language of Love never seems to reveal its vocabulary, how do you express the emotion that you feel inside? The emotion that isn't even an emotion itself, for you feel happiness, sadness, anger, frustration, complete joy and many others. Love is a mystery, so what is the solution? Taking the highest possible equivalence and hoping that they feel the same... on the other side of love. This is beautiful

[Tony Jordan]

I agree with all you said Drift.
Real love - makes you sick with all those mixing emotions - no wonder the words get either stuck or vommed up in the wrong order !
Thank you for reviewing this one my friend.
:)

[Gee]

I knew it, knew it.....the way you lingered a wee bit to long when kissing my cheek, your hand refusing to leave my waist, glances caught and held to long as a smile of resignation played across lips....
Enjoyed this Tony as would the person it's written for/about. Morning

[Tony Jordan]

Oi... you have a Barbara Cartland in you trying to get out Gee. This review proves it.
Lol
Thanks for your cherished words mucker. Appreciated.

[Gee]

Nae problem......

[Tony Jordan]

Hey maybe thats what the bunch of grapes are - actual Barbara Cartland doing an 'Alien' body-burst on ya !

[Gee]

Ooooh, the pink lady bursting outta me butt...yuk

[ern]

This is so beautiful, short, and sweet. I love it.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you very much Nicki.
I appreciate your visits.
:))

[Loroth]

This was a great peice, I do however feel that even if the first part is good, it's not as strong as the rest, it feels like it dosn't quite fit together with the others. Maybe it's just as simple as not using "that" so close to eatchother, but I realy do love your writing. So I hope you don't take offence, and keep up the good work.

[Tony Jordan]

Oh yess Loroth I do like that suggestion. I would be the first reviewer to point out the overuse of a word heh heh. Thanks for that.
I appreciate your visit very much.
:))

[The dark story]

Oh yess! So true. At times the emotion and passions are lost for apt words, words that can do justice to them. I loved the way you have penned it down

"they scurry
away
into the dark
and hide when I
reach for them
because they too feel
unworthy
of you."
I was jaw-dropped when I reached the end. So strong. To be honest, I don't know why but I felt myself in a Disney world of the Beauty and the Beast, just that there are words not utensils hiding from me.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you very much Atiba. You're far too kind.
I like that Disney reference. It's so young, it makes me feel old. ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Muwahaahaahaa
;P

[The dark story]

hahaha it's a pleasure Tony. But remember that I scare the youngsters buwhaahaha

[Luna]

That is so so so true my friend. Sometimes words can't describe what you feel what you want to say. Nicely written :)

[Tony Jordan]

'If language were liquid - it would be rushing in - instead here we are, in a silence more eloquent that any word could ever be." - Language by Suzanne Vega (my hero)
We all feel this from time to time Luna. Glad you could relate. Thank you very much for your kind review.
:))

[Luna]

My pleasure :) and those were beautiful words ^~^

[Tony Jordan]

I thought you'd like them
This is the song. Her lyrics are out of this world.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gdZQYXSIceE

[Luna]

I got it :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I realise this is not written in relation to The Twin Towers but is still applies. Who has the words to comfort the dead, the survivors or simply those of us who watched this atrocity unfold. Lovely piece of flowing free verse.

[Tony Jordan]

That was an awful, awful time. Unforgettable. Yes it would not be easy to find words or to rationalise the why's and wherefore's of that day John.
Thank you for your thoughts.
:)

[AYVID N]

A simple yet so elegant and pensive an expression of love. Appreciated very much Tony.

[Tony Jordan]

Aww DIVYA - thank you. This was just a scribble.
Thank you for reading and reviewing it.
read moreAww DIVYA - thank you. This was just a scribble.
Thank you for reading and reviewing it.
:)

[Bacchus]

oh those s****y scurrying words
you only have a lifetime to try
their infinite order... to capture it just right.

[Tony Jordan]

The infinite order - I like that - aaaand we have to make them thrum at the same frequency as her heart or they are useless.
Thank you for your review Bacchus. Appreciate it.
:)

[GreenShoes]

Oh, wow, this was very nicely composed.

I don't understand the title, though.

By the way, I like the onion.

[Tony Jordan]

The onion is me (if I were an onion that is)
The title is the time I wrote the poem at 11:11 am
Thank you again openadoor34
I appreciate you fluttering in (your avatar) and reviewing this one.
I appreciate your wee visits.

[Beccy]

Sometimes, just a glance across a crowded room can say more than all those words never spoken.

I know what you mean though; often, what defines us to others, can also confine us.

Beccy.

[Tony Jordan]

So true Beccy - our strengths can also be our weaknesses.
I had a glance once in my whole life - once !
The world stopped.
But she didnt - when I got to the part of the club she where she had been standing, she was gone.
lol. Maybe as I got closer she freaked out!
Thanks Beccy.