Eleven eleven

word mining doesn't always lead to word finding

I wish

 upon the stars 

that I had the words

 I want 

to write to you.

Words which you 

deserve 

And yet something

tells me - I have all the words

I'll ever need 

for this Life.

They reside in me

but they scurry 

away

into the dark

and hide when I 

reach for them

because they too feel

unworthy 

of you.

Author's Note

ignore grandma problems ;p

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Theres so many words in all different languages but the language of Love never seems to reveal its vocabulary, how do you express the emotion that you feel inside? The emotion that isn't even an emotion itself, for you feel happiness, sadness, anger, frustration, complete joy and many others. Love is a mystery, so what is the solution? Taking the highest possible equivalence and hoping that they feel the same... on the other side of love. This is beautiful

[Tony Jordan]

I agree with all you said Drift.
Real love - makes you sick with all those mixing emotions - no wonder the words get either stuck or vommed up in the wrong order !
Thank you for reviewing this one my friend.
:)

[Samuel Dickens]

This one made me smile. I sometimes try to find words to express fathomless love, but come up short. These words are too weak, I think. Now I know the words I really wanted were just hiding.

[Tony Jordan]

I think they leak out of the eyes when we look at those we love with such a heart tug Sam.
Thank you - your words certainly hit their mark my friend.

[Lyn Anderson]

You have captured here, the way words elude us when we feel LESS than the one we love. It is a romantic notion but not actually a good feeling. We should always admire the one we love, but never to the point of worship. I think you found the words just fine.

[Tony Jordan]

Guilty as charged KL.
I do put people on pedestals - very insightful of you.
It's a huge default of mines - I guess setting the other up to fail??? You're cheaper than therapy and wayy better.
I appreciate your review my friend.
:)

[Kelly Scheppers]

This reminds me of that proverbial lump that gets stuck in ones throat when trying to speak...when trying to read something so eloquent and beautifully said...like this!

So wonderful to meet you, Tony!

[Tony Jordan]

I'm flabberghasted Kelly.
I've read some of your work and I know the calibre of it so ...(self-talk "Shut up Tony, just say thank you")

erm... Thank you Kelly.
It's great to meet you too.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...you've made my day...make that my week! ; )

[Tony Jordan]

Whoa - I'm just getting my breath back after having my ghast flabbered Kelly...heh heh
:)

[winter;lyra]

I have many times thought about what's more....adequate? Recognizing unworthiness or denying it and seeking self-assurance disguised (i like this word) as already-possessed self-assurance - hold on to this line I'll get right back
This poem shows something different, correct me if I'm wrong, someone is stuck in a definitive psychological inability to reach the significant other in question

So, I don't know what's on the core of his state (regarding what i said first) and this may be because I sense a bit of...fear? yes fear

(i love delving too deep into things)

[mercy party]

unworthy stars. cool concept. easy read, like those.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you for your words MP.
:)

[R.E.K.]

This writing has soul, just the way I like it. Paint more poems like this please!

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you R.E. for your kind review.
:)

[Brett Moore]

I like the idea that the words you have inside you are conscious of worthiness. I like it because the words may feel they are unworthy of your muse, but then again, maybe they feel she is unworthy of them. Maybe your words know more than you do in the moment. And wouldn't that be nice. All those words I wish I could have saved for the right moment. An interesting thought you've given birth to.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Brett. I agree with your thoughts. I like the added idea you spoke of 'the words know more than you do' - that is a brilliant thought. So who has control? I have read so many poems on here where the authors describe their writing process to be almost 'automatic writing' which would tie in to your idea there.
Thanks again.
:)