You've laid out the rhyme scheme beautifully! each stanza holds its own and they've flown together beautifully. Nothing made me pause until the very end, where the last line was a bit longer and had a bit of a different beat to it.
I don't rhyme well, so it is always a pleasure to read poems that have a strong structure.
As for the content I could not agree more. Rumors are essentially the structure of all of us these days. Rumor and reputation. We tend to focus negatively on what we call rumors but there can also be good rumors that we depend on. Especially in school as you'd want kids talking about how cool and awesome you are, weather you've done all of the things they claim you have or not.
Your work has instilled some thought into rumor and for that I thank you!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
And a belated thank you to you for your very articulate review!
Ahh, an excellent subtle, humorous, satiric, poetic diatribe warning rumor-mongers. Perfect form, cadence and rhyme. Perfect theme! Love the doggy picture too! "Nip it in the bud"- I agree totally. Kudos!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You are indeed an interpreter extraordinaire, thank you my friend!
Tom, I love the brilliant way you hit upon on all the bad characteristics of gossip and rumor. A social cancer, mutating, spreading. My favorite verse follows:
"Hence spreading infection.
of invidious deception
without a smoking gun"
A great message, with a big punch!
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7 Years Ago
Yes indeed so Divya, and quite often spawned from nothing more than jealousy..thanks again my dear f.. read moreYes indeed so Divya, and quite often spawned from nothing more than jealousy..thanks again my dear friend!
Rumour is part truth. That line sticks out for me. I've seen rumours become something more than they started out as making them a erroneous by the time they spread around. They're no good for anyone. I like the way you related that.
you managed to take a very serious and damaging subject and interjected fun in a playful rhythm. Most don't realize how deep rumors can not only hurt others but your own soul. that negativity breeds karma whether intentional or not. I really enjoyed this one.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you April, they do indeed have a negative and divisive way of causing harm, self doubt and ins.. read moreThank you April, they do indeed have a negative and divisive way of causing harm, self doubt and insecurity, quite often jealousy has a lot to do with their source.
7 Years Ago
couldn't have said it better- that is almost always the source. you're welcome :)
You've laid out the rhyme scheme beautifully! each stanza holds its own and they've flown together beautifully. Nothing made me pause until the very end, where the last line was a bit longer and had a bit of a different beat to it.
I don't rhyme well, so it is always a pleasure to read poems that have a strong structure.
As for the content I could not agree more. Rumors are essentially the structure of all of us these days. Rumor and reputation. We tend to focus negatively on what we call rumors but there can also be good rumors that we depend on. Especially in school as you'd want kids talking about how cool and awesome you are, weather you've done all of the things they claim you have or not.
Your work has instilled some thought into rumor and for that I thank you!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
And a belated thank you to you for your very articulate review!
A very realistically written composition on the rumour factor which has gripped the entire world especially the young generation. Loved the flow and your writing style. Simple but captivating :)