Dandilions

A poem of devotion !

Dandelions

Some prefer and pick a rose,
to share in loves delight
Red is the favoured colour, 
for cupid's arrow to take flight

Others choose the daffodil, 
majestic in vibrant yellow
Sure to make a lady smile, 
when offered by a handsome fellow

I prefer to pick dandelions, 
perhaps, a peculiar habit?
As not only do I think they're beautiful,
so does my adored, pet bunny rabbit!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Tom,
"Dandelions" what a nice little story with lovely rhyme this was. I felt thankful for all the flowers that have been such a pleasure to enjoy, dandelions included. Your pet bunny rabbit must have loved the way you cared even was given a nice yellow treat! This was a delight to read and just find a sweet moment. Thanks ..................Kathy

[Tom]

A belated & most humble thank you Kathy!

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, this is just adorable!! Your pet bunny rabbit sounds like it is as spoiled as my doggie!! I can just imagine you handing it some dandelions to munch. It is admirable to be devoted to our pets! And as with all your writes, the rhyme is excellent!!

[DJ]

Very cute, short piece. Your rhyming flows very well, I really enjoyed how you chose to describe each flower. A beautiful and humorous write :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I have the dandelions. I have sweet grass for the jack rabbits. I didn't know rabbits enjoyed the dandelions. I like the flow of thoughts and the good ending in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tom]

Yes indeed, dandelions are full of nutrition your rabbits will love them, just be mindful they have not been sprayed with weed-killer or insecticide at any time.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Tom. A good write and fun read. I like the humor of the piece. Good imagery, flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Good depth of feeling. I love the twist in your final stanza. Good word choice as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

[emmy bon]

very beautiful poem you got man well penned and well read

[Britt Foster]

Cute poem. (: I like the levity of it and the vibrant imagery of the flowers. If you're wanting some advice, I think it would flow much better if you used fewer commas. The ones after majestic and offered, for example, are misplaced and create a mental pause that disturbs the rhythm.

[NA]

aww this is beautiful. I love dandelions too :) x