Life changes

Life is never the same always

I am loosing my faith

  I can't find any hope

    Life has brought me an ache

      With which I cannot cope

         I never needed to be strong

           In my life, there was nothing wrong

             For what I once had 

               I am grateful

                 But now that it's gone

                   It's too painful!

Author's Note

What do you guys think?

Reviews

[Abyssmouse]

There is a sadness in the realization of how fleeting the structures of our lives are. Your wording conveys what it needs perfectly - at least in my book.

I very much like the flow in this.

I am curious as to why the color difference? It's not something you usually do.
Well done in any case :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Well, I had done it based on the main subject of the line, like the one with wrong had red, grateful had green and hope was blue. But I've changed to black because people think it's distracting. Thanks a lot for your words and for reading it! :D

[AE]

I like the format. It's a concrete visual representation of how life has been going down hill. The poem is innocent, honest, bare, and simple. I like it, good job!

[mou]

AFTER THE DARKEST NIGHT,PURE DAWN WILL ARISE....

[Insight "MH"]

The way you portrayed the poem makes sadness so clear, it's like a diagram going downwards.
Good job.

[Asra Hakak]

simple and lovely
great piece
and relatable

[Yurie Lee]

Nice effect with the slant thingy, it's quite amusing and it fits kind of the theme of going downhill, I guess~ Solid poem, my friend~

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot, that is what I was aiming for :D.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest tone to the words. When we lose too much. Hard to grasp. I understand the honest ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you, Coyote for your compliment.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Delmar Cooper]

Slanted writing. For each perspective there is a another. The Pisan tower only leans to the right from this side.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot for reading!

[Emily]

I really liked it!!
Keep it up!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you for the encouragement.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

poking fun at itself in the end throws the feelings from sad to something lighter. i like the lighter feeling taking over.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot! :D