The effect of today’s sins

This is a poem I wrote for a villain of my novel "The written forgotten".

In the world of the living

Demons cannot win

In this heart full of hate

Love has arrived too late

For in my head rules the rage

That is caused by this new age

Author's Note

What do you think of after reading this poem?

Reviews

[E G TEN]

Hello Alondra, I have read somewhere that the best way to
Enhance your characters, are to write something About
them outside of the story. I've done it as well, I believe
It works. You've done it very well in this piece, very cool.
Thanks for the send'

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you very much for reading it! :D This isn't the only piece I've done, I hope to upload more in the future, but for now they would be full of spoilers for my novel.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

throw a chorus on it and flesh it out a bit farther, sell it to Pink, sit back and collect the rewards.

[Imperfection2aT]

Wow! Your use of colors and rhyme scheme really speak volumes in this poem. You've added a visual element to your work, and it pays off. Great job! Keep up the good work.

[B]

i seen one too many times
sin leads to anger
And anger leads to the death of the human soul

taking peace away

[TM]

I believe this is very true. Hate and anger really have taken everyone over recently and its really sad. I loved your colors in this poem, it really drove them forward a bit more. Good job!

[Tomoe Tellez]

I tend to add a lot of color and glitter to everything I owe, hadn't done that with the first poems because I thought people wouldn't like it. So thanks a lot for your kind words.

[AaronFreitas]

Lots of colorful and powerful words. Sounds like an interesting character.... curious to see how the role plays out since there are some contradicting feelings. Heart full of hate yet love arrived too late. Will it change his heart or what will become of the love that has arrived. Interesting :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

*O*, I hope you like what I did with this character in the story, whom will be appearing pretty soon. Thanks a lot for reading and for your comment!

[747]

In me this strikes up an outburst of deteriorated rage. I'm not sure if I agree with the first 2 lines but the rest of it I find quite spot on for how I feel about our technology ruled society.
I also like the way you broke it up by using the colours. I like it, good job.

[Tomoe Tellez]

You know the color was something I added at the end and it's something most people like about this poem, so I'm glad I did it. And the first two lines are actually something the character I based this poem on has to come to as a conclusion in my novel. Thanks a lot for reading!

[Abyssmouse]

It makes me consider the terminology of spirituality and myth, and the fact they depend upon time.
Or in other words, It leads me to the think about the current growth and fall of spiritual ideas that form a kind of community, and what that would mean for me as an individual.

I very much like the fact this is tied to your other work ,
by doing it in this way, you have given the story more depth. :)

Awesome!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks, I'm glad you thought about my story like that, I hope you like the character on which this is based on.

[Rachel McLean]

i know i'm gonna be a bit biased on the negative side about this poem, only because I freaking love the topic of demons and most of that supernatural stuff, but I do have to admit that i like the flow of the piece. The highlighting of the words was also a pretty cool idea. Keep writing!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot for your words, I glad you liked it!

[Bear]

A philosophy to live by, but I question your comment of love coming too late, the only way love would be too late is if it never comes at all. The depth of this is thought provoking and lingers in my thoughts, powerful even haunting, well done. Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Well, you're right, love is never too late, but sometimes the pain left by others is too deep and not even love can change the way you see the world, it might help you forget it for a while, but when love turns around you remember your pain and hate. Thanks a lot for reading and for your comment!

[Bear]

You would think so but find someone who never found love at all in there live and ask them if they would be willing to suffer the loss of love over their suffering from never having known love and I would bet they would take love lost every time :~)