Haven of love- A collaboration with Danny

Just a poem Danny and I made to help me get over my writer's block. Thank you, Danny!

There's some wine and bread left
A candle to lit dreams while you rest
Take the bed, you need it more
Don't worry, I'll sleep on the floor
Just wish me a good night
Tomorrow everything will be alright

Your wounds will heal in time
Our scars will resemble the fight
We went through in this life
You're not alone anymore
For you are the one I adore

Reviews

[Bear]

Getting two minds to come together with one understanding may be the hardest thing a writer can ever do. Getting two pens to write the same words with the same meanings is a monumental event so I applaud your accomplishment. To work with another and turn out a work of literature like this deserves a Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot for reading!

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

thanks for asking me to look at this. its well deserving praise. good job guys

[Imperfection2aT]

Very beautiful! I love the lines and flow of this piece. Great job!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks :D!

[Terry O'Leary]

collabs are hard...
well done!!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Well, it wasn't too hard for me, I had fun writing it with the help of Danny, he is great. Thanks for reading!

[TM]

I thought this was very simple and sweet. I enjoyed it and hoped it helped the writersblock

[Tomoe Tellez]

It sure did thanks to my awesome friend Danny, thanks for reading!

[747]

This is cute. I like the rhyme and flow but I also like the message. A nice piece to get you out of writers' block!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks, I'm glad you think it's cute, like I told Adams, I don't normally write romance, so writing in this genre woke some different kind of inspiration for me thanks to Danny.

[justdandy]

Wowww. This is just great. I really loved it.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks, I'm glad you loved it!:D

[Adam Adams]

Kinda ... intriguing to read how love may shape the analogies of love-vibes. Love's such a beautiful as well as darkest thing ev'r in the world that has potential to ... take life away off the world, neither it brings peace nor so much loneliness ... what all it serves to heart's virtue with heartaches ...

... like the title either: "Heaven Of Love" .. sounds astounding.

Take the bed, you need it more
Don't worry, I'll sleep on the floor

These lines're romantic enough to be adored so I believe, the poetry's speaks the heart, beautifully. Would be looking forward to reading "you"!

[Tomoe Tellez]

Hey, thanks a lot for your kind words, I don't normally write romance, but Danny helped me, I'm pretty happy with how this came out.

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice journey to a very good ending.
"You're not alone anymore
For you are the one I adore"
I like the above ending. To be adored. A very good place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you for reading this poem. :D

[A writer]

It's always a pleasure to read poetry like this. And since my boyfriend was part of the creation of this one, I just had to read it. Cute write, I give maximum rating :)

[A writer]

I wonder. . Why are some reviews ignored, while others are not...

[Dani The Unreviewed]

It's a mystery...lol.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Sorry, I didn't ignore it. It's just that sometimes I check the reviews out in my mom's cell phone and her keyboard is in spanish, so it doesn't let me write in english, LOL. But thanks a lot for reading, Danny did a great job in helping me out of writer's block.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

xD we just thought...not important. lol usually you comment on reviews right after reading them. lol

[Tomoe Tellez]

Yes I do or did, I read them on the cell phone and at night I'd answer them in my laptop, but now I'm trying to repair it, it got infested with virus, lol, so now I use my brother's laptop whenever he lets me.

[A writer]

Oh... well then, it is all cleared. :) I want to see more of your collaborations, in the future :-)