Dead Hearts

The mirror reflects

Him, you and I

Playing in the sand

A tear falls from your eye

 

Years pass, now we’re in our teens

We meet again; you looking frail

I should have asked what happened

You fall asleep; Dad tells me HIV

 

I open up my report card

Sorry, you’ve been held back

My friends are now beyond me

Like friends I once knew

 

Time doesn’t heal wounds

Neither does regret

I often yearn for the days of old

Still, bygones be bygones

 

I don’t believe in Ghosts

I’d rather rest in peace

Than wander around the earth

Memories are real enough for me

 

I sometimes envy the grave

Doesn’t make me suicidal

This world and all its burdens

Like success I once knew

 

Every man is a window

Things come in and out

Everyone is a Widow

We all lose something we love

I see them on the TV

Bonnie Elizabeth Parker and Clyde Barrow

Robbing banks, getting jailed

I weep; they were kids I once knew

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Author's Note

Inspired by the song Dead Hearts sung by the band: Stars... and Some of the things i've never really shared or spoken to anyone about... Everyone has someone or something they've lost, some painful experiences, e.t.c...The important thing is to embrace as much good and love as possible, Give love and you'd get it back..Channel your pains into art, music, writing, Love, lessons for others..Never let nothing, especially the past hold you down.

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Wow, this is so solemn and grave and emotional. It's hard for me to give it the comments it deserves since I'm a natural nutball :)

I think the part that most stood out to me was, "Time doesn't heal wounds/and neither does regret". This just hit me like a sack of bowling balls falling from the clouds to land right on my toes. Everyone always says that time heals everything but I've really never agreed. Time distorts everything, time helps you forget. The regret thing also had a big impact on me. I've never really thought of regret as a healing emotion before and your poem made me wonder if maybe it was a little healing. Eh, what do I know :P

Great job though :D :D :D

[Tomi]

Thank you so much for your review.. glad it got you thinking

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

This is really beautiful and interesting. It's definitely emotional, you can completely tell that it came from the heart. I agree with you when you said that everyone has lost someone or something, gone through some painful experiences... I think that's what allows people to relate to this poem, which is a quality I think is important to a writer; that they're relatable.


"I don’t believe in Ghosts
I’d rather rest in peace
Than wander around the earth
Memories are real enough for me

I sometimes envy the grave
Doesn’t make me suicidal
This world and all its burdens
Like success I once knew"

I really like those two stanzas a lot, how you're talking about when we lose someone, all we have left are memories of the times that we shared with ten. Then how you're talking about how you envy the dead because of all the pressure and burdens you have to deal with during life...

Sorry if I kind of rambled on and went off topic, haha, I feel like I might've..
Well, beautiful poem, and it's evident that it's from the heart.

[Tomi]

Haha! no you didn't go off topic..thank you for reviewing this :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahaha, it's no problem (:

[Abd-afeez]

This is an emotional and interesting piece, the world is filled with a great deal of people that follow their hearts, there dead hearts by the way. I like the way you painted such moments, moments that make you so much wonder about the essence of life. I know this world is not a absolute beauty or home for only good, yet it is pertinent for each honorable mind to relish goodwill. I like that you find your voice and you so much passed your message, thanks for sharing.

[Tomi]

Thank you :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Nice job that includes a lot of elements, age, illness, media , so a poem with a lot of facets.

[Tomi]

Thank you :)

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"I don’t believe in Ghosts
I’d rather rest in peace
Than wander around the earth
Memories are real enough for me" sheer brilliance in these lines,Tomi :)

[Tomi]

thank you cord :)

[dunnia]

Wow this is so powerful and deep..absolutely loved it

[Tomi]

thank you :)

[Circe]

No words can express the eloquence of this piece.... I am completely moved.. "you fall asleep; dad tells me HIV".. just life shattering.. in a few words, you put so much emotion into this. And somehow after reading the stanza "every man is a window, things come in and out. everyone is a widow, we all lose something we love"... I just feel better... like there is some hope and we are just sharing all the hurt and darkness... wonderful & powerful work.

[Tomi]

thanks circe :)

[Tomi]

A whole lot! Glad you liked it

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad poem. I use the use of Bonnie and Clyde. Hard to look back and wish for things lost. HIV killed everywhere. Sex had become a game of chance. A lot of hidden story in the poem. Life teaches us many things. Tears will be many for friends lost to foolishness. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote