My Last Breath

 My Last breath

Voices surround me, tongues spoken in Machinery

The soil stuck in my boots but my heart fuels with bravery

My past is a tunnel riddled with rocky mountains

In the of end pitch black lies a beautiful fountain

Sharp Memories scar my brain, ugliness in my body are stained

But the fury burns nevertheless if I don't see the end of this day

Circumstances I am done with, Never again will I start running

Had I claim I was innocent I'd be lying

Duty comes in many forms but you just keep fighting

Fear is a feeling, to act is a decision

Breaking is easy, but not if hope is breathed in

Feeling Hopeless can drive a man to be desperate

Purpose can drive a man to be perseverant

Stare down the adversity, despite the strength you lack

Stand firmly on your feet, not one step back

Charge into the dying light with everything you have

Walk into the fire for a story you can brag

A loss will mean nothing if you have given it your best

You placed your body in hellfire for you to take the test

If this is the end and iv only seek death

Bare in mind that I fought until my last breath

Reviews

[E.P. Robles]

Hello and welcome to this website. I am rather new here too -- maybe two months. I like to review and analyze poetry and some do not like what I do but here it goes anyway.

This poet portrays a vivid and introspective exploration of struggle, resilience, and the pursuit of purpose. The poem encapsulates the human experience in the face of adversity and highlights the importance of perseverance, hope, and the will to fight until the end.

The opening lines emphasize a sense of isolation and detachment from the world. The poet describes being surrounded by machinery and voices, suggesting a mechanized and impersonal environment. However, amidst this sterile backdrop, the poet's heart is fueled with bravery, indicating an unwavering spirit that transcends the circumstances.

The metaphor of a tunnel riddled with rocky mountains represents the challenging journey of life. The darkness at the end of the tunnel symbolizes the unknown, yet the poet finds beauty in this uncertainty. It suggests that even in the face of darkness and the unknown, there can be a source of inspiration or hope.

The poet acknowledges the scars and ugliness inflicted upon their being, both mentally and physically. These experiences shape their perspective, yet the fury to overcome persists. The poem emphasizes the power of choice—the decision to act and face fear, rather than succumbing to it. The line "Breaking is easy, but not if hope is breathed in" implies that hope is a source of strength that prevents one from giving up.

The poem underscores the importance of purpose and the resilience it can inspire. It encourages the reader to confront adversity head-on, even in the absence of strength. The image of standing firmly, not taking a step back, evokes a determination to face challenges courageously.

The poet employs powerful imagery of charging into the dying light and walking into the fire, suggesting a willingness to embrace difficulties for the sake of a meaningful story. This highlights the idea that losses and sacrifices are not in vain if one has given their best effort.

The concluding lines encapsulate the overarching theme of the poem—the relentless pursuit of one's goals. The poet states that even if death is imminent, they will be remembered for fighting until the very end. It serves as a reminder that the struggle itself, rather than the outcome, defines one's character.

Overall, "My Last Breath" is a poignant and thought-provoking poem that delves into the depths of human resilience and the pursuit of purpose. Through evocative language and powerful imagery, the poet explores themes of bravery, perseverance, and the indomitable spirit of the human condition.

[TomboyVisionary]

Well said! Thank you very much for the review.

[E.P. Robles]

It was my pleasure. A great write