10/1

First use of a diary �" not exactly something I would do. Mum had bought it for me, I swear she thinks I’m a girl. Is it that hard to see that I have a male’s organ and no breasts? I’m pretty sure it’s obvious, she’s just oblivious.
Um, my older brother came down to visit this weekend. He’s not leaving for awhile. Mum has just started to get sick again, so Dad, I and he are looking after her. It’s a lot of work, too. I hate seeing mum sick, it’s all Dad’s fault for cheating on her behind her back. I don’t think she knows it, either.
I saw them. I saw Dad and another woman at his work, in his office. They were quite fast and feisty �" it was obvious they were having sex.
I want to tell mum. I do, so badly. I told my older brother and he’s in denial �" thinks I’m making things up just to gain attention. That’s what I don’t like about my brother, he’s a prick. Selfish and unreasonable. Not to mention, he’s a bit of a narcissist.
You see, we are �" what you call it? �" quite a good-looking family. Dad is cross from Johnny Depp and Ashton Kutcher. Mum is cross from Scarlett Johansson and Catherine Zeta Jones. Trenton is cross from Taylor Lautner and Andy Sixx. Me? Yeah, well. I’m not sure. I don’t really pride myself with my looks, per say.
I have clear skin, I’m pale, I’m short �" five nine, to be exact �" and I’m skinny. I have dark hair, like all of the family. I have a lip ring in the middle of my bottom lip and my passion is skating.
I don’t think I’m that least bit interesting.

Corey

Reviews

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Considering this is written like a journal, it's a good start. It has enough information to let the readers know about the current events in the story without overloading the reader with a lot of unnecessary details. I also like how the main character is observant of everyone around him, but also doesn't seem to fully understand himself yet. It give a much more realistic outline of character, which every story needs.