Wild Romance

If only my eyes could touch you
And my fingers could see you
Listen to my silence
Hear it
The footsteps of my footsteps
Shadows of my shadows
Dreams in my dreams

Broken capillaries
Bloodshot eyes
What are they
Naught to a broken heart

A breath
Stolen from my parted lips
Devoted to my goddess
Whose voice gently touches
And awakens the sleepy daisies
Coaxing shy mimosas
Spreading the wings of Dawn
Letting the Night's starry blanket fall away..

Oh, my beloved!
For as dawn turns to dusk
And I sink slowly into your eternal embrace
Let my death
Be adorned by the perfume of your breath..

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

although I thought the ending predictable, the voice is so very, very resolute and pours out
like liquid. In fact that first stanza depends on a strange parallelism of time past and present
like finding the bones of a wild thing in the bed with you; from touch to silence to footsteps to shadows
to dreams is the fast pace of everything wild perhaps which makes for a rather beautiful subtext.

I love this. I love how you made me feel about the eternity of both love and death..
Well written and delivered......dana

[Irenic]

A breath 
Stolen from my parted lips 
Devoted to my goddess 
Whose voice gently touches 
And awakens the sleepy daisies 
Coaxing shy mimosas 
Spreading the wings of Dawn 
Letting the Night's starry blanket fall away.. 

Oh, my beloved! 
For as dawn turns to dusk 
And I sink slowly into your eternal embrace 
Let my death 
Be adorned by the perfume of your breath.

It is love......:)❤

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

"If only my eyes could touch you
And my fingers could see you
Listen to my silence
Hear it
The footsteps of my footsteps
Shadows of my shadows
Dreams in my dreams"
Every single word here is pure brilliance and magnificence. Do fingers usually see? Eh, no, but if we open our minds and imagine they could, it could well be possible! And hearing the steps of the footsteps...one must really be attentive to details, nuances, perceive between the lines. And overall just very mind-blowing piece of poesy! Passionate and ecstatic but at the same time with a pinch of melancholy and fatality.

[B]

Oh my
Waw
wohooo
if you say that to any human they would faint on the spot lol

[jeannemarie coulter]

beautiful writing, i enjoyed the read...thank you

[dan]

Tks: When I read a piece such as yours, rather than breaking it up into manageable parts to analyze I like to digest the whole write; in your case the whole is definitely greater than the sum of its parts. And that's NOT to discredit the effectiveness of the parts! I just think, 'What feeling does this poem elicit inside of me? Where did it just take me?' When I have my answers I then have your intended meaning. VERY nicely written and presented, a gem. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

Such beautiful words and picture you paint for the reader in this one Tks... nice work buddy!

[Tks]

Hey Aaron, thanks for stopping by, and for the lovely words! Hope all is well with you :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

beautiful, Tks, loved it. Thank you for sharing this romantic poem. :) Rudi

[Tks]

Thank you kindly, Rudi! :) Have a good day ahead!

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered!
the wording is fantastic and imagery to mirror:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Tks]

Thank you James :) have a great day ahead!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautifully penned..
Each word echoed like a piece of symphonic rhythm.
A touching, heavenly description.
Amazing write!

[Tks]

*bows* thank you Jyoti! Coming from a talented writer yourself, that means quite abit :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Oh come on, I am a novice and learning myself..
And you are very welcome.