Closer

If only we were slightly closer

Things might be different

Seeing you would be a reality

Smelling you would be all I would ever do

Hearing your voice

Is the mellifluous music my soul has thirsted for

And will dance to

Feeling your warm skin against me

As we lay under a blanket of stars

Ready to visit the Moon, Mars,

Perhaps Pluto.

If only we were slightly closer

Perhaps all I would ever know

Would be the taste of your lips against mine..

As we dissolve into fiery brimstone

And hellfire

All I will ever know

Is salty seawater

As the Seven Seas stand sentinel

Between us.

Reviews

[B]

Longing for someone with such intensity
and wishing they were close
to love
and hold
to share a life

simply
Beautiful

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Sensual and touching tale of longing and love.
Enjoyed the mesmerizing imagery!
Keep up the great work!

[andrew mitchell]

What a lovely inspiring write

[Mitali Shah]

Lovely lines serving each lines with nature's soothing feel

[Ana B.]

Beautiful and so very relatable....a splendid write dear author :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Love and people separated by ocean or land. Leave us in a limbo.
"All I will ever know
Is salty seawater
As the Seven Seas stand sentinel
Between us."
I enjoyed the poem. Create places and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry,
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work Tks :) Glad to see ya writing on here :)

[Tks]

Thanks for the kind review, Aaron! Good to see yourself again as well, hope things are going well for you!

[....................]

A relatable poem that is dripping with longing...well-done

[Tks]

Thank you FT! It means a lot to receive a compliment from an accomplished writer like yourself :)

[dan]

Your wording is so resonant with naked emotion, it made me immediately remember situations in my life in which I wanted to say something to another, so desperately...but we just weren't on that level of closeness required for such personal feelings to come out. And THEN years later wondering why I didn't just take a chance and voice my support. Your wordplay in this piece, Tks, is outstanding. Very nicely done...dan

[Tks]

Dan, your reviews always leave me wondering as to how there are still people in the world who are good, kind, and pull no punches to improve the world. You sir, I take my hat off to you for always giving genuine, deep heartfelt reviews, for it shows the world what a good man you are!Hope you are well, and thank you so much for the kind words!

[dan]

To get a good review the writer has to write a good piece. It's that simple. Thank you for YOUR kind words. take care...dan

[Jamestown]

Painted a marvelous picture with these fantastic words:)
Well penned, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Tks]

Thanks for reviewing James! Glad to see you once again, and my heartfelt appreciation for your encouraging words :)