this is very sweet
to hold onto her
even her eyelashes are enough to feel her presence
i guess this is true loyalty
to not need much
to feel you are with someone
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you for dropping by, Nisreen! :) that is very sweet of you indeed. Thanks once again for the p.. read moreThank you for dropping by, Nisreen! :) that is very sweet of you indeed. Thanks once again for the positive review!
This is such an eccentric and amazing piece! The title attracted me to get into it, and Bravo, I got a glimpse of such an exquisite work! Had I been in your place, I would only skim off the layer over the tea and heartily drink. I appreciate your creativity :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you for dropping by and for the wonderful review, Deepika! Yes indeed, I will take your advice.. read moreThank you for dropping by and for the wonderful review, Deepika! Yes indeed, I will take your advice :)
This one is funny indeed :) I loved the build up to the last stanza -
"Two eyelashes
Adorning my tea.
Now tell me, folks
Wouldn't it be foolish
Of me to say
I am alone?"
Good job
I love Darjeeling tea, too, so I completely understand the love affair. I enjoyed the imagery of this piece but was thrown a little by the use of the word "scowl" at first and had to read it over a few times. Then I realized that the sun couldn't scowl as you came to terms with the fact that you are not alone and that your use of the word scowl was to describe the shift in focus from the beautiful setting to the reflection of yourself and how you feel lonely. Anyway, I may be reading too much into this and perhaps it's the darkness of the word scowl within this otherwise warm and loving piece that has me thrown for a loop. That being said, I believe I will go and make Darjeeling tea! Thanks for sharing.
I agree.
"Wouldn't it be foolish
Of me to say
I am alone?"
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Hey Coyote! Thank you for reading my poetry, and spurring me further:) Have a good day ahead!
.. read moreHey Coyote! Thank you for reading my poetry, and spurring me further:) Have a good day ahead!
Pen On!
hey, Tks! that verandah looks comfy. we should sit together sometimes to spend some free time to feel the warmth of the sun...and the tea! hahah this piece is lovely. I'm a little bit perplexed about everyone there, though (or is it just you? then, who is this 'she'? or....) hahah it was a fun read anyway. oh yeah...what's darjeeling tea? sorry for asking :)) I've never heard of it before.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Hey Jonah!
Totally, mate, we should spend some time together just.. appreciating the small t.. read moreHey Jonah!
Totally, mate, we should spend some time together just.. appreciating the small things in life:)
Aha, 'she' is, how might I put it, "Eres toda mi vida" :) the smile of my soul.
Darjeeling tea is a tea from West Bengal, and it is a really good tea:) with aromatic overtones.
Have an awesome day ahead, thanks for stopping by!
9 Years Ago
aaah that tea sounds very nice! yup you're welcome :)
You gave life to the lifeless in this piece, I particular found the visualization of this work very alluring.
Cheers , great work again!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Hey Roshan, thanks for stopping by! Your words are very encouraging, and I'm glad you are happy with.. read moreHey Roshan, thanks for stopping by! Your words are very encouraging, and I'm glad you are happy with this piece:) Thanks once again and have a good day ahead!
Hi there, welcome to my humble abode!
*bows deeply*
My name is Tks, which are initials for my real name, which is too long, HAHAAHA.
(ok, it's Tejash Kumar Singh)
I absolutely love to live life.. more..