Time and Love

Time may run out. Love is eternal.

The waves tugged and pulled at the seashells

As your eyes twinkled with mischief, the bells

Around your-wait, no, not bells

Am I daydreaming again?

Good, let me daydream then!

Then again, it's no surprise that just like the waves

Which meet the shore, before parting again

We meet again this lifetime

Drawn irresistibly towards each other

Like vanilla and chocolate

But wait! Forget not

Our little strawberry

Born out of our love

Kissed by the Sun

Caressed by the Moon

And as dawn turns to dusk

And our bodies turn again to the Earth

We are pulled away again

Fret not, My Queen!

For we will meet again

Guided by our hearts (and love handles!)

Reviews

[dan]

Tks, This is a very nice write, employing vivid imagery to convey its message. Breaking in with a "Wait, am I daydreaming again?" is a nicely timed interruption to alter the course of the write. Nice technique. A very pleasant piece, well done! take care...dan

[Tks]

Dan, your visits are appreciated more than you know:) I can't thank you enough, my dear friend, for your kind words and constant encouragement. Will definitely review your newest writing pieces, looking forward to them!

[Ishita Dixit]

Forget not our strawberry!
Lol!
Who wouldn't want a lover like you who can add humour to passion?
Has the entity on the phone been giving you writing tips?
Anyway, if this is what you make with your pen on, then Cheers!

[Tks]

I'm flattered, Ishita, thank you! Gosh, you really do know how to pull my leg hahaha. Your reviews are always so refreshing and bubbly:)
Now that you mention it..I do need to find out how did that phone ring off the hook...
Have a great day ahead, and I see you have a new piece of writing out. Will surely enjoy it!

[Ishita Dixit]

I hope you enjoy it Tks! :)
And thankyou for the praises! :D

[XtheLoneWolf]

Nice imagery I could feel the passion in your poem and visualize your thoughts.

[Tks]

Hi LoneWolf, thank you for taking the time to stop by:) your words of encouragement will encourage me to do better! Have a good day ahead!

[Afraa]

Damn... the imagery in this piece really got to me. I didn't think it was possible for words to come out this beautiful. Such a creative piece indeed, and I love how you threw in some humor in the cauldron. If you think about it, this poem has all the emotions playing behind it. You have constructed such a fine masterpiece.

Enjoyable read, Tks.

Thank you for sharing!

[Tks]

Hi there Ms Afraa!
I'm ..... speechless. Your words are too kind, they put a smile on my face:) especially from an experienced writer like yourself, such exultant praises might just make me blush hahaha.
I just love writing from my heart, and at times, the humour does burst forth hahaha. I can't stop rereading your awesome review! Have an AWESOME day ahead! And don't forget to smile!

[Afraa]

This review comment officially made my night. Such fine people here on WritersCafe. This website is probably the best thing in my life right now, as depressing as that sounds. Haha!

Thank you again for your kind words, Tks. Right back at you!

[ANTO]

"Lets not forget our little strawberry.." - thats adorable.

Loved the sincerity but also the humour in this - it speaks volumes about the author and his wealth of riches of love. "...love handles.." xD

cool writing my friend. :))

[Tks]

I have to admit ANTO, your heart shaped poem was really good. Thank you for stopping by and perusing through my writing pieces, it means the world to me.
Ah, of course, love handles...always there no matter how low my bodyfat becomes hahaha.
Have an awesome day ahead, hit me up with a read request soon!

[Mary Bradley]

Very witty and sweet Poem ! I quite enjoy it , daydream or real true love won't fade ...it's constantly there in our heart :-)

[Tks]

Hey Mary! Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it:) yes, you are right, true love and day dreams are eternal, they will forever be in our hearts. Hope your writing is going swimmingly well!

[Jamestown]

Fabulous write, really enjoyed this,thanks for sharing.

[Tks]

Hey Jamestown! Thank you for stopping by, and I'm glad if it made you even a slight bit happier:)read moreHey Jamestown! Thank you for stopping by, and I'm glad if it made you even a slight bit happier:)

[Jamestown]

Ha ha! I'm always happy, just showing another side of writing, thank your for your concern
that is sooooo thoughtful, b-blessed, PTL!

[~]

Reading this poem felt like watching a film with camera zooming in and out. Highlighting what's important.

[Tks]

Wow, that was a really interesting review, moonskittles! Thank you for dropping by! Can't get the final lines of "Good morning love!" out of my head. "My lungs will fail for sure darling". hahaha have an awesome day!

[~]

I liked the poem a lot. I meant it as a compliment. :)

[Tks]

Thank you Moonskittles! :) Your words are always a compliment and encouragement to me:)