Intertwined Roses (Part 1)

Their eyes met, hers twinkling like the stars of the night, and his, grey and forbidding. Yet, a palpable frission of tension emanated between them.

A cool breeze quietly filtered through the curtains of the dimly lit room. Gabrielle shivered as the breeze swept over her, snuggling closer to Matthew. He groaned and pulled her closer with a sigh, his warm chest pressed tightly against her erected n*****s. They were both naked.

(3 hours earlier)

"Why Matthew, surely you're not hitting on me, are you?" Gabrielle gave a tinkling laugh that accentuated her warm brown eyes, her hands playing with her long, jet-black hair.

"It depends on which area actually.  I prefer areas that are hidden from the prying eye. It makes it more....meaningful, I guess". Matthew smirked as he downed his glass of Grey Goose vodka in one fell swoop. 

Gabrielle suddenly blushed, before reaching over and smacking his arm.

"Ouch, that hurt!" he exclaimed in mock annoyance. "What am I, a punching bag?"

"It depends on which area actually" she flashed a quick smile, batting her eyelids purposefully while letting her gaze wander across the nearly empty bar, of which Matthew and herself were the last few stragglers.

He had come onto her the moment he had entered the bar, clad in a scruffy black t-shirt and dark blue jeans that did nothing whatsoever to help his case. Like a moth drawn to flame, he had approached and parked his arse onto the bar-stool beside her. At first, his shy glances in her directions had been met with stares of such ferocity by Gabrielle herself that he quickly looked back into the bottom of his glass, his balls having been retracted. 

Reviews

[Philip Muls]

Great read. Good flow. Strong images of the bar. You capture the sensual mood well.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Sensual and romantic!
First meetings and that tingling moments always make sweet memories.
You so very well captured it!
Well done!

[Tks]

Thank you for the constructive review, Jyoti! Thanks for dropping by as well :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[Jennie Baron]

I like the note of playfulness interspersed with the explicit description of the sex. The strong attraction is evident. If there's anything I would change, it would be to try to find a less used simile than "moth drawn to flame." All in all, good writing and quite erotic for a short piece.

[Cryingkate]

Excellent writing here, but damn I feel nasty, like I just witnessed a walk down gutter lane..
If they don't feel like dirty guttier trash, I sure do for witnessing it..... :-)

[Ishita Dixit]

This was such a fun read!
Reminded me of ' Crazy Stupid Love'!

[Mary Bradley]

Sexy and fun to read Tks... keep it up :-)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Very flirty, sassy, playful. First words spoken like in a romantic movie, remembered forever. Makes me reminisce my own first encounters with the opposite sex. First meetings are always fun!

I like how the story is non-linear and yet it follows very clearly. And you write in such a way that you don't give away all the information and yet the reader can easily connect the dots. Good job!

[Lavender Soya]

Whoa, I like the intricate details. I have been reading your works and this one's new. Moreover, the imagery is quite vivid and strong. I was not only imaging the scenes, but I was moved by the budding romance. Lastly, you have a good choice of words, can't wait for part two. Thanks for sharing! :-)

[Tks]

Thank you Lavender! It is a definite honour to be praised by a writer of your stature, have a good day ahead! :)

[Lavender Soya]

It's always a pleasure to leave the most sincere review. :-) Ditto

[Jamestown]

Nice job, your story telling is terrific. Thanks for sharing and send me the next
one, b-blessed!

[Tks]

Thanks for dropping by, James! Have a good day ahead!

[wordman]

well tk this is a great story,waiting on part two

[Tks]

Thank you for stopping by, wordman! Looking forward to new pieces of writing by yourself too:)
Do inform me when you have new pieces, alright?
Have a good day ahead!

[wordman]

it was my pleasure,post about once a month