Unspoken words

A slow rap lol

1. Tonight I miss you babe
Remember we walked November road on our first date?
Now my body's feeling weak damn without you
Baby I'm froze, im frozen close to death How I need back
Hold my breath
Flashback
We both knows our moment we spent that night was amazing
Our love was real I can't take you outta my mind.
I called my guy, said he'd be busy working on this weekend
Sorta that imma lonely
I need you here by my side
Maybe we should work it out together again?
Don't you know everything hurts and the fact im losing ?
Im too lost though im with another guy Right now im screaming out your name baby come back, come back to me

Ch: tonight I miss you, I'm losing my mind What can I do to make you mine again

2. I fell in love for the first time you kissed me and held me in your arms
I took our love for granted but baby all I asked you is one more chance
Baby i love you
Blame me I deserved.
But could you hold that?
Im dying with regrets and how im sorry for everything.
I called my guy said he'd be busy working on this weekend
Sorta that imma lonely.
I need you here by my side
Maybe we should work it out together again?
Don't you know everything hurts Nothing but losing?
I'll be forever lost if I'm with another guy Right here im screaming out your name baby come back, come back to me

Reviews

[𝔸ʂɾıéli໐ຖ Ş..]

i like the flow and enjoyed the story behind it tho i think you should try to use spaces more like:

"tonight I miss you, I'm losing my mind
What can I do to make you mine again"

to make it easier for the reader to pick up the flow/rhythm typa-thang

[Toto James]

Yeah ya right, thank you, I appreciate ya view

[Soumya]

Some grammatical errors I felt...and if the sentences could be complete...but otherwise all fine...

[Toto James]

Hahah yeah my grammar is weak, lemme know where I should correct it

[Soumya]

Thanks for taking it sportingly...

[Toto James]

No worries, I'm glad you told me

[Wild Rose]

Lost love hurts so much
No person or words can help
Time does heal memories fade - eventually
It doesn't help to go back - look back
New fields, interests, friends - are the best answer

[Toto James]

Thanks mister Rose