My shooting star

You're my shooting star,
Everytime I see you I wished something.
You melt my heart,
I long to be with you.
Far away in a vale, while we sit watching the gleams of moonlight holding hands
Our lips touched for the first time.
Just you and I together, Happy ending will make a perfect fairytale.
Let's get elope! My heart spoke "
Take me to your castle where enchanted love never dies.
And where i'll never wake up from my dreams.
But never had a chance of being a little nutter since I'm only a dream,
A wish maker.
This is why I called you my shooting star.

Reviews

[Ghost writer]

That's cute, I love the idea of a person as a wish, the only thing is you don't "get" and elope. It wouldn't even be AN elope, it's just elope. Did you mean to say, let's go elope?

[Toto James]

You mean it should be let's go elope?

[Ghost writer]

yeah cause you don't get elope, you do elope

[Toto James]

Hehe eh eh hehe eh thanks for the the correction I really needed one.thank you thank you

[Ghost writer]

Of course and the poems really good!

[Toto James]

Thank you, and in far future if you come across my poems with grammar error , don't hesitate to correct me again .

[Ghost writer]

okay, Will do, I'm planning on reading more of your stuff

[Toto James]

Yay. . .wow thank you sir

[Ghost writer]

Your welcome sir :)

[Toto James]

Lol do I look like a man? I had my profile though . nvm call me miss toto

[Ghost writer]

Okay but I'm a girl too :)

[Toto James]

Aww OK, but would you still help me?

[Ghost writer]

Ha ha of course! :)

[Toto James]

Yay teehee , thank you so much

[Wild Rose]

Shooting Star would whisk you away to his castle high in the hills
No noisy smelly traffic no other people
Just us alone to satisfy each others wishes and desires
No one to hear your songs of ecstasy
As our play reaches its summit

[Toto James]

Very nice, I like how you put it