No Heart Never Love(d)

An experimental poem. Comments?

No Heart Never Love(d)

 

 

It makes sense to just give up,

to throw away my chances,

to leave behind the pain.

But my heart begs me to follow

all those desperate old clichés:

“No pain, no gain.”

“Follow your heart.”

 

What if I have no heart?

It’s entirely possible.

After all, I’ve never loved,

and never been loved.

 

 

“Never give up.”

 

Okay.

 

I’ll pick up the pieces and start again.

Once again.

Maybe for the last time,

and maybe not.

 

“Love yourself.”

Maybe that’s all I need.

 

M a y b e.

Reviews

[victoria]

wow this is a poem that is really realteable. it makes me think, what if all you really need is to love yourself? i pretty much fell in love with this, i love the whole idea of it. ontop of that, the the flow was really good, and it moved really easily. amazing job :)

[LadyNaida]

What if I have no heart?
It’s entirely possible.
After all, I’ve never loved,
and never been loved.

But some how I sense so much love and passion behind these words. Your heart is en-caged and it is just waiting to be free and once it does...the passion it will give to that one true love, will be the kind of passion that loves fiercely and without measure.

I loved your piece!

[Shannon]

This is great, so different from many pieces i read, and it was amusing. The little motivational quotes and the lines contradicting and arguing with them were great, like watching you argue with yourself really. In a fascinating and mesmerizingly odd fashion, you've created quite the gem here.

[Lucia]

Hmmm....you given the reader a lot to think about.
I know this'll be in my head all night long lol
But I'm just confused about one thing.
I the speaker has yet to be loved what pieces are he or she picking up?
Just a thought, thanks for the read request!

[Breezie Kae]

Woah. This is so powerful. I can relate to this.

[SM Davis]

Nicely done! I like the inner voice and the struggle. I like the conclusion you've ended with as well.

[Jessica Elaine Stevens ..]

This was wonderful. I love the structure, the way you played with format and with bolding, font type etc. I also like the message, we try so hard to find someone to be with, but first we need to love the person we are before we're ready to do the same for someone else. And waiting for that special someone to show up can be the hardest part of all...

[BloodRED6203]

Ugh the tragic story of heartbreak. One we must all go through. Your writing is very interesting. But DONT worry I really, really liked it! Especially, since I can relate to it. Though I believe almost all of us can. Love can be so cruel and at the same time so....breath taking. I really liked your poem. I also thought it was neat how you bolded the words of your title and had it scattered through the poem. Very nice, well done!

[Simpleasures]

An experimental poem? Well, it was well done. Sometime our random thoughts or ill constructed pieces that aren't as thought out are the best ones. I like where you went with this. Beautiful piece.

[Aranee]

I love the structure of the poem. Very artistic.
This is something that many can relate to
Since many also have experienced times where they feel like giving up.

I like the last stanza,
where the person is unsure of whether their own love is all they need to move on.
But it seems to contrast with the second stanza.
Which makes you wonder if the person really has a heart.

The second stanza seems to run with deeper meanings.
"After all, I've never loved, and never been loved."
It's as if the person doesn't want to even try to fall in love anymore.

Great Read.
Hope to read more of your writes XD!

[A Wanderer of Dreams]

I can relate on a level to this. It is hard to be motivated or to be hopeful about things like love (or for me about finding a purpose). However, I believe the direction of the end of your poem will lead to success and I like that it ended with hope. If you love yourself you will find happiness in a variety of places. You show a conflict between wanting to just let things go and wanting to fight and succeed beyond this issue. The reasoning you show in both sides of the conflict reminds me of how I reason with myself. Also, the words and thought process this poem portrayed flowed naturally to me. Well done