Long Sleeves

You would always smile

and say, "I'm fine"

But, you wore long sleeves 

all the time.

I knew but you didn't 

but what could I say?

"Hey I saw your scars,

so just quit okay?"

Knowing me 

I couldn't do anything

Cause I know 

you'd think I'll start telling

And even if you didn't 

I would be afraid 

that you would be mad 

and nothing would be okay

But look at me

I can't tell you to quit

because I'm nothing more

than a hypocrite

Because I had a secret 

that you never knew

that I hid my arms 

with long sleeves too.

Reviews

[JMaster1]

very powerful , I can understand what you mean here
I love your writing

[WordlessFacade]

I'm glad you like it. I like your works as well! :D

[1Disawsum]

I love the sense of vulnerability, making it sound that the victim at the start had more power than you did. And yes, it is scary to tell the victim of self-harm to stop, you never know what emotions will come pouring out at you! The twist in the end though... great but such a sad ending, didn't expect that from this poem! But it still flowed, and it did make sense, so congratulations! Keep writing, love your poems.

[WordlessFacade]

Thanks! :) I will continue writing. I'm glad you like them! I really like yours too!^-^

[1Disawsum]

aaw thanks! :D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is devastating. I just wrote a poem about Teens Of This Generation and this fits in well with the first stanza. I believe you reviewed that poem too. Some people have reasons to cut themselves, while others do it for whatever I guess. The people that have legit reasons to cut themselves I really feel sorry for. I hate that they must do that. Writing and drawing is what helps take things off of my mind. I am the type of person to feel sorry for a person if the reason is needed. Some people cut themselves because of someone breaking up with them; while there life is going perfect. There is plenty fish in the sea. I tend to rant over this topic a lot. It is just people think that their life is so horrible, when in reality there are a lot of people worse off in the world. There are people that do not know where their next meal is coming from, their parents are off somewhere, they witnessed one of their family members being killed, or they have been diagnosed with a deathly disease. Yet, those people try their best to stay strong. I encourage that for every cutter I have ever come in contact with:STAY STRONG. This poem is overall well-written. I like the concept of the title and the message. In the end, you wanted your friend to tell you the truth even though you already knew. That is what friends are for; to lean upon when our lives are giving us troubles.

Keep writing!

[WordlessFacade]

Thanks and I know what you mean =)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You are welcome! :)

[Chidoriflower]

Hmm. I can relate to this. I have a friend who used to cut, but he never told anyone...I found out via friend to friend. We all hide some things, with long sleeves. Brilliant. :P

[WordlessFacade]

Thanks! and same here. :)

[Laura Harrison]

I can relate to this, you wrote it well :)

[WordlessFacade]

thank you =)

[Aethereal]

Addiction is one of our major social problems: Your poem inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you to keep as your own:

Addicted

Hide your scars with wiles:
camouflaging smiles,
checkered long sleeve styles,
shady low profiles.

[WordlessFacade]

Thank you, and I like the poem :)

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! Your poem got its message across, and so I tried to express part of the same message using my style of poetry, but only in four lines as a mono-rhyme. I could have added more mono-rhyme versed to add to the message, but this is your poem and not mine. A different mono-rhyme sound could be used in other verses.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Good job with this one. The meter is not perfect, but it doesn't need to be in today's poetry. The flow and rhyming sequence are good and it reads well out loud. You do a good job of bringing the story full circle (which I like). And you bring out the true feelings of shame on a current topic and psychological disorder. You can be proud of this one, it's good.

[WordlessFacade]

Thank you :)