Land Of Ruin

For the CREATIVE POETRY group.

It was a hot afternoon
Humidity swirled high
The creature was fretful
Ardent feelings flared
There was nothing jovial happening
The heat crept across the landscape
The creature glared at the sun
How unmerciful and lethal it was
The creature spread it's bat like wings wide
It had no allure beyond it's frightful image
It's voice exploded across the dying landscape
Clamant  and demanding in it's sound
The creature lifted up into the white lifeless sky
Creating a painful rupture in the atmosphere
Poison rained back down to the landscape below
No life would ever grow from this toxic moisture

Author's Note

Words used are underlined.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This is one for a sci-fi tale. It takes us on a the beginning of a journey. It sounds like a story unfolding. Why is the moisture toxic? This is the thought that is going through my brain as I read the last line. What cause this world to be so poisonous? Good writes often create questions.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was dark vivid write, well done!

[KAREN]

Awesome use of the words, well done!

[Black Cat Fever]

Very dark and mysterious. This has the edge of horror to it.

[Star Wolf]

Wow, sounds creepy like a dark fantasy story. Awesome!

[Sean M. Addams]

love the concept of this piece great job on this one

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Good use of the words. This sounds like a very frightening and stark place you've created here in your poem. Excellent work!