Cemetery

Across a fog shrouded cemetery
The sound of many feathery wings carry
The tombstones stand stark and bare
In this forsaken place where nothing cares

Hear the crows voices as they cry
In this land where the forgotten dead lie
Their wings slice through the coiling white
So thick it's luminous with an eerie light

The crows flutter about this landscape of grey
Here they find a lonely place to play
But their voices are not the only voices here
The restless dead try to make their presence clear

The crows circle about this desolate cemetery
They linger here and there, never in a hurry
The fog shifts and heaves amongst the damp tombstones
The dead cry, feeling abandoned, cold and terribly alone

Reviews

[Trevor]

Good feel to the poem...nice and dark. I would suggest that maybe "feathered" would sound better in place of "feathery" in line 2. Maybe it actually doesn't sound better though, I don't know. Poetry's not my thing, but it just seems like that would work better. It's really up to you though

[Eric Cox]

This is shiver material. I've always found cemeteries fascinating. This is great, nice pen on this piece.

[Marie Harrison]

Loved your poem. It has a romantic vibe too it. I know that sounds strange since you were describing a cemetary. But that's what I came away with...It's a beautiful poem to me. I actually felt like I was in a cemetary when I read this poem.

[Tate Morgan]

It is a poem with a story and as you know I like rhythm and rhyme

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

ewwww i love that cemetery feel
thanks for lending it

i clicked because of the title. i've always loved cemeteries. and you didn't disappoint.

[Closedown]

Wow, this is exactly how I feel sometimes when I go for little walks around the cemetery (an ancient family tradition). Very spookily and well written.

[Black Cat Fever]

Rather eerie write, this is. I sometimes wonder if the dead aren't really lying in their graves trying to get the living to notice them. Nice touch with the crows in this too. Love this write!

[Star Wolf]

Fantastic imagery! I can visualize this piece but your choice of a pic only enhances this poem. It has a very lonely, eerie feel to it. Love it!

[Mary]

i liked this one a lot, you really set a scary tone though out the piece that flowed nicely. gave me goosebumps :)