A Summer Moment

The hot summer breeze

gently rustles the trees

twisting and fluttering

their soft green leaves

 

From these pale green branches

robins gather and sing

causing within me a longing

for the fresh and gentle spring

 

the relentless summer heat

is cruel and oppressive

the sky is an endless uniform blue

all this making me a depressive

 

So I sit in the tree’s shade

lost in my tranquil dreams

the leaves twist and flutter

and the robins continue to sing

 

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Oh there is such a vibrant flow to your words, filled with wondrous description. Can feel the overwhelming heat that can drain the mind and spirit... and the longing for the cooling freshness of spring. Love the feel of the last lines, getting lost in dreams...

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the summer. I don't mind the heat but dislike it when it get above 90. The winter makes me feel sad but I understand the emotions you have placed in this piece. We all have our favorite seasons. Mine are Spring and summer and parts of the fall. There is great imagery in this piece and I can picture someone sitting under a tree on a hot summer day sipping lemon tea.

[Joseph - Michael]

You've written it in short, but a real great deal of details on how any one perfect day in summer would be and how it would affect as well... So soft and soothing...

Overall, nicely done...

[Emily B]

I'm dreaming of autumn . . .

Summers can be a burden for some. But they offer us a chance to enjoy the sun, and enjoy the fresh air. I've learned to ignore weather for the most part, unless it will directly effect my life.
Another magnificent poem! It's sometimes hard for me to understand how you create such beautiful imagery, all the while maintaining perfect flow and rhythm, and I must say you do so with great skill!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Summer is so great and yet loses its welcome real quick... the rhythm and flow were great and the descriptions were picture perfect.

[Ladysue]

This flowed really well...It has been so hot this summer. I never thought I'd wish for spring or fall. I hear you. A lovely piece of writing...

[Eric Cox]

Very cool poem. Beautiful too. I hate Summer as well. "all this making me a depressive" humorous words, Summer is definitely depressing. A very cool write.