This is beautiful. The imagery in this piece is very strong and your description seem almost magical. (I know that sounds corny, sorry. But, really, it's wonderful).
The only thing I thing you could change is you say 'objects' quite a bit. You've used such a great vocabulary and the word objects in itself is the most attractive. I know how hard it is to find so many synonyms for a single word but I think it will make a huge difference in the flow of your poem if you change even only one of the 'objects'.
Anyway, really well done. I loved it.
This is beautiful. The imagery in this piece is very strong and your description seem almost magical. (I know that sounds corny, sorry. But, really, it's wonderful).
The only thing I thing you could change is you say 'objects' quite a bit. You've used such a great vocabulary and the word objects in itself is the most attractive. I know how hard it is to find so many synonyms for a single word but I think it will make a huge difference in the flow of your poem if you change even only one of the 'objects'.
Anyway, really well done. I loved it.
When Venus gets too close catfish have been known to come up out of the water onto the shore, feed awhile, then go back in.
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