Dual Lady

for the Creative Poetry group.

She opened her mouth wide and swallowed the sun
It was a cataclysmic event when darkness reigned
The tiny people became crazed and frantic
The whole event was mythical and very strange

No dragon did this, it was just a young girl
An old woman who was inflamed with madness
They are one and the same, like yin and yang

The moon is gone but they are still so hungry
Consummating nothing they yearn to try and try again
This time they swallowed the moon and half the stars
Ecstatic, they howl and scream into the dark wind

Their hamartia* is hidden by their erratic behavior
But their behavior only spells certain doom
The young girl and the old woman, they are the same person
Crying in failure they seek forth and more planets were lost

Believe nothing but believe everything else
A tale that maybe is really true
Where in the universe, the galaxies or cosmos
Find the dual lady and maybe she'll tell you


*Tragic flaw

Reviews

[John B]

Almost sounds as if you are talking about the twin black holes they found recently yet at the same time it would seem that you are describing the duality that is the human mind. Feeling young and yet aging in time. It is an aspect that I often am at odds with myself.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[Kiari Sabon]

its a really nice write captures the mind i rally liked it :}

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[Eric Cox]

Cool mysterious horror. An excellent write. Excellent imagery and feeling brought through. Very nice pen upon this.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks!

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome. :)

[Tina Kline]

:)

[Audrey Howitt]

Well crafted piece--and I feel it has layers to offer upon re-reads--really well done!

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[Caradoc]

A very interesting piece.

I like it.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Wow, this is chilling yet enchanting too. It does indeed have a feel of a legend being told. Very good writing.

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool piece ..very thought provoking ... overall you did an awesome job on this :)

[Tina Kline]

Thanks a lot Sean and its really nice to see you on there again! :)

[Coyote Song]

This reads like a legend or a myth. I can imagine this story being told on some dark night where everyone takes a turn or maybe its a lesson for youngsters. The imagery in this is powerful as is the tale. Very haunting. Good poem!

[Tina Kline]

Thanks!

[Craig2591]

Very nice poem. For me it describes a black hole, which consumes everything and inside of it time ceases to exist, hence the old woman and young girl at the same time.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much!

[Black Cat Fever]

Very eerie and chilling. I like the storyline, it does read like a myth or legend. You did a great job on this.