Poster Girl

A short, short story. The clue is in the title ;) Hope you enjoy!

I close the door. We are alone in this room again. It's been two days since I last saw you, Megan. Have you missed me? I missed you. 

The room has a musty smell and I realise you haven't touched the meal I prepared for you before I left last time.

 Your eyes are red-rimmed and swollen and when they meet mine I can see you've been crying. My heart goes out to you. You have missed me! You mumble incoherently, prompting me to be by your side in a nanosecond. I stroke your hair; it feels tangled beneath my fingers. I kiss your forehead, once, tenderly. 

"You really must take better care of yourself while I'm away, Megan. I just came back to check on you but I have to go again." I turn to leave and you start to cry. Your violet eyes are wide, pleading with me not to go away and leave you on your own again. I kiss your forehead once more. "Don't worry," I assure you. "I'll be back." You cry even harder but this time I don't look back.

I close the door softly on you and your pitiful tears. As I lock my front door, a bearded man thrusts a piece of paper in my hand. It's a picture of you, Megan. You are smiling at me sweetly from the Missing Persons poster. But you aren't missing are you Megan? I know exactly where you are. You are locked in my basement, bound, gagged and crying for my return and your release. Don't worry, I'll be back to see you in a few days.  

Maybe.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

OOOOOOMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGG. That was a fantastic ending......I never ever ever saw that coming.
I really relly really gasped at how hard the ending hit me. This wuld be a great openener for a full blown story.


Please do follow this up

Mark.

[Tina H.W.]

Thank you, Mark. Your review is very very encouraging. Your shock at the ending of this piece was exactly what I tried to aim for. Thank you so much :)

[matrixmark]

Not a problem. It really was sooooooo cool. Really, really loved it.

Mark.

[Ballpark Frank]

Holy crap on a cracker!!! Man how chilling. You had me going too big time. What an excellent write.

[Tina H.W.]

Thank you Frankie, that's just the reaction I aimed for. You didn't disappoint 😉

[Ballpark Frank]

I will read more of your stuff for sure.

[R J Askew]

A cracking twist to this one, dark, macabre, and delightfully twisted.

[Tina H.W.]

...Thank you very much!

[barleygirl]

This is an excellent surprising twist . . . kinda creepy in an entertaining way. One thing that shows us the dominance is the way the conversation is one-sided -- well-done. Very realistic scene of a person who is seemingly loving & caring, but actually very much not. The reveal is well-crafted too.

[Tashida]

Oh... My... God! Need more. That was a turn I didn't see coming. Fantastic :) Loved it!

[Jacob Clifford]

Very creative title. Unorthodox story, with a hint of mystery strewn throughout. Interesting write.

[Tina H.W.]

Thank you for your review :)

[C.m.v.]

I enjoyed this but I'd like to read more! Why was she in particular abducted? What happens next? I look forward to finding out! :)

[Tina H.W.]

Thank you, C.m.v :) glad you liked it. I myself wish knew what happens next! I just haven't thought that far ahead. I would like to follow this up though... ;) Thank you again. Your words mean a lot to me :)

[Dave Potter]

This is nice writing... I DO HOPE THAT THIS IS FICTION... that would be pretty scary if not. Thanks for the post, Dave

[Tina H.W.]

Haha thank you, Dave :) And, yes - very much fiction :)

[Splatman73]

Well, I have to say I love your style. It definitely fits the cafe's tl;dr mentality. That's not a bad thing though. You keep your pieces short and say all you have to say with them. I found the subject matter of this piece especially intriguing. Can't wait to read more of your work.

update: And by more of your work I mean the last piece I hadn't already read. You have anymore work because this is amazing!

[Tina H.W.]

Thank you so much! Your words are very encouraging and means an awfully lot to me. I'm very pleased you liked it :)

[Rob L]

like a mobius snapshot, with a full twist halfway through the image - cool

[Tina H.W.]

Hey, thank you!! :D