Blue shadow

A short romance poem.

If I could,

I'd love for you to see

images i have of you,

black and blue

the scenery of beauty, true...

 

Maybe take a glimpse,

of an amazing being,

the girl with the lovely blue energy flowing,

in the grace of each step,

the gentle and soft gaze,

to the sounds and words that beautifully phrase,

"the blue shadow,

of the girl i once knew"

the turquoise line of energy following

 

Sometimes, into her eyes i gaze

to grasp it, i always try

as it is, it presents a maze

a second or even more,

sparkling blue gems,

and struck i stay, pit of amaze

a blink later, she either says

"hi" or 'bye"

i realise then i can't hold it

 

 and thats the end of the loveliest part of my day...

untill another time, i always pray...

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Reread this one, i like it so much .. the black and blue does mean beaten here in the USA but i could tell your meaning was not of someone beaten... it workd for me ..

[Holly O'Brien]

Oh my...the blue shadow does make me picture an exotic energy or force. Blue was always a cool color to me...sort of in between hot and cold....and blue flames of fire has always been prettier. haha...ok I'm done rambling about the "blue shadow" aspect. Now, all I can say is...this poem is simply foretelling the truths to come....she is a beauty that can't even be captured by time as her blue shadow moves like 3D behind her lol

[Dream Weaver]

A truly enchanting romantic piece.
Great imagery!

[Stef Outsiders]

Beautiful work...!

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. no problemo ... i'm a really old person and since the time i can recall ... people have used it in the sense of "beating up someone black and blue" ... hence i thought i should let you know ... as i am an attentive reader ... but you're the master of your words ... i was merely expressing my thoughts ... and you're the master of your poem ... as you wish ... no worries ... :) ...

[Timtim]

@Serah, i didn't know about the use of the phrase black and blue, but now that i know, i think it adds to the poem, because there's the element that despite how much i know, i can't hold it. Thanks

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. an incredibly beautiful poem ... my minor input would be that "black and blue" is usually used in a negative sense ... you've justified the blue beautifully ... but maybe you could think about editing the black ... just my thoughts ... in any case, this is a stunning poem ...

This is beautiful, loved the way you were mesmerized by everything blue about her.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

you have 'open for interpretation'... seems like an internet friendship to me .

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

"the blue shadow,

of the girl i once knew"

the turquoise line of energy following

Beautiful ... seems someone made quite an impression on you and inspired such a lovely soft and romantic poem. Very nice and enjoyed.