I am she

something I wrote for a character of mine (it was written from the character's perspective) rather dark and a little ambivalent/melodramatic. Rawk.

As I stared into my mirror dark
I saw a girl like me-
at her breast a hole, her eyes aglow
a brutal girl was she

she asked me for my oldest fears
and I gave my frailty;
that I should try, and fail, and fall
and have all taken from me

she asked me for my deepest rage-
I gave my impotence,
the cords that bind and hold me fast
while I struggled in silence

she asked me of bitter despair
and I gave her sacrifice-
that I should give what others won't
while they flourish in the light

She asked no joy, no love, nor peace,
but was sated on my woes
her gaze was slaked, her breast was filled
my stalwart friend, not foe

I asked her why she would accept
such things for her toll
she smiled at me and replied
"such things make me whole"

She began to fade, I asked her name
but none she gave to me,
I asked if she was my reflection
she answered "I am she"

Author's Note

grammar and poetry never work for me, so.. pointers in that direction would be nice.
I also seldom write things that rhyme, so pointers/critiques would be appreciated.

other then that; thoughts? opinions? snide remarks?

Reviews

[zainul]

Wonderful write