Block 1

Upon opening my eyes I hear shuffling from behind me expecting a surprise I align myself in the direction of the noise. Searching for the focal point of the noise I spot an Abomination betwixt the pillars I gaze upon the abomination, it's body the color of flesh twisted and mangled it has multiple mouths all over it's grotesque body, it speaks each mouth emitting different pitches and in unison.
Abomination: "You.... Boy.... Where did you get that..... That accursed...... Demon's Soul....?"
"Draugen... I received it from my father... Lord Draugen of the Abyss."
"I see, you must be Choral.... The Machine sewn in Flesh... You are just like me... What do you want with me?"
"I have come to seek companionship.... You Øydis who have no place amongst the living I have come to ask you to accompany me in my travels."
"Very well... I shall lend you my Magnetics."
Øydis stood from her ruined shrine and reshaped the mangled flesh into her original form. The Maiden of Great Luck and Sea.
"I must say... You're much more beautiful than I thought you to be beforehand."
Øydis's body divided one half turned to light and encircled me and the other half reformed into the delightful beauty known as Øydis.
"May I ask where our destination lies?"
"It lies within the Edge of Serenity.... Just beyond Ocean's Divide."
"What is it that you seek?"
"I'm not so sure myself... However I will stop at nothing to get there."
"I see... These times are peaceful aren't they? No mortal has ever visited me since Ashen Cell.... It is a pity however the course of time is always ever changing. It cannot be helped."
"Let's hope this peace lasts for another century.... As for Ashen Cell I hope another genocide like that doesn't occur again I don't feel like fighting... We must go prepare to join my right arm."
"Understood."
I pull up my sleeve and lift my forearm to face her light starts to shine outward from the mirrors and she is reflected into my arm.
"Its warm in here.... I wish to live in here forever."
"That is a wish I can grant.... Magnetics 21 Apparition. I dissolve and leave the mountain scape.

Author's Note

It's pretty straightforward with dialogue they speak after each other so but my main reason of posting this is if it seems interesting or not I'd appreciate any feedback as this is not a final product

Reviews

[AliceaRW]

The idea of the story is good. I hope you've been developing this! But, I understand what you're trying to do with the dialogue. But... as a reader, and not in your mind but in my own, I am unable to "see" what you see. I require the narrative to show me more, so I can remember it better as the story unfolds. Even if this is not the beginning of the story, where character description, scene setting, etc., is "hook critical" this particular piece could use the added "show me" narrative because it sound like a great opportunity to share more of your character and scene details. Keep writing! **I'm not sure how I'm supposed to rate pieces yet...? I'm giving this a 100 because I support your effort :)

[Pink Pastel]

Lost of words____________

[Supercell01]

What do you mean?

[Pink Pastel]

Its's good^-^

[Supercell01]

Thank you:)