Gave It All To You

It pretty much speaks for itself.

I gave it all to you,

But all you did was take.

Now you’re under my skin,

Building me a world of hate.

 

One day I gave my heart,

But then you sold it on.

Reaching as I fall,

I cannot grab.

 

Our love died ages ago,

And how I miss it.

Now loving does no good,

But there’s nothing to lose.

 

You were just a lie,

Did you enjoy watching me die?

Will you at least sweep me up?

Instead of leaving me to rot.

 

We’ve played all our cards now,

No more aces left.

No more kings to play,

Nothing left to do but quit.

 

Is there really much more you can say?

Nothing left for you to laugh about.

You’re in my past,

Your words won’t bother me.

 

I’ve let you go.

I’ve let it all go.

You’ve kept it.

You’ve ruined it.

Reviews

[Zachary_James]

This is full of raw emotions, from the staet to the very end. Sometimes we all end up in realatiomships that once was great, and at the end we don't want to be in the realationships anymore. I can relate to this, so very well because i have been in the same situation you wrote in this poem. I think this is great.

[Falling Leaf.]

Very nice, although, in my opinion, there are a few things that could be changed. You seem to start out rhyming in the first stanza, but then you don't throughout the rest of the poem. It made it sound a bit awkward, since I was looking for rhymes through the rest of the piece. I suggest taking out the rhyme. Also, I would rewrite the last two lines of th fourth stanza as follows:
"Will you at least sweep me up,
Instead of leaving me out to rot?"
It makes the question flow better to me.
Anyway, just something to think about! Overall, very nice.

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[Virtuosa X]

Such a nice work. I know the feeling; knowing you've given your all, for the other to take and keep, without giving nothing in return. Great job!! keep writing.