Heart Damager

Look at what you’ve damaged now.

Just as I thought I had a friend,

You ran away and left me alone in the cold.

Now I can’t see your stars anymore.

 

If I had known how bittersweet this would be,

I would have slid away a long time ago.

When my heart was whole that is.

You knocked me down every day, like play blocks.

 

What happened to us?

The laughs we used to share,

The fun we had,

It’s all gone, into the dark.

 

I’m not sticking around any more,

I’m not letting you hurt me any more.

You can find your own way.

But just don’t come back to me.

Reviews

[Allan Eddings]

I am enjoying watching the emotions surrounding this particular relationship evolve and change in the writings of yours I have read. I apologise for finding pleasure in your pain, but pain can still be beautiful and I am ever - if nothing else - beauty's willing servant.

Here in this piece imagery returns but again as with the first one of yours I read it does not take centre stage. Emotion still reigns supreme in this piece to. I particularly enjoyed the "play blocks" metaphor. Especially suitable not only for the visual elicited but also I think because it acknowledges the naivety of this love.

Another line that resonated was "I would have slid away a long time ago." If only because it made proclaim to myself: one should slink and slide away from nothing, not for shame, not for pain, nor for pleasure, walk boldly and surely.

I am enjoying your writing immensely, again, as always thank you for sharing.

Regards,
A.E.