Alone

With a tear in my eye

and smile on my face

I walk on my path.

 

I go up to the sun,

just to fall down hard.

I am hurt inside.

 

I want you to come,

to take me by my hand

and pull me up, to stay with you.

 

But you aren’t here,

to take my hand.

You have gone away.

 

So don’t cry if someone else

comes to me, and pulls me up

to stand by his side.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Wow, this was hard to read for many selfish reasons... : ) The whole of the poem is adorable, deliberate for the intended message, and in this sort of "goodbye", my heart grew heavy when I read "and pulls me up to stand by his side." ....I,usually, read you before I try to slip into dream, and this poem is hard to "hear". Who do I Love?! xoxox -Your Mark

[Tiasshy]

Thank you. It was intended for a heart to grew heavy to rethink what are you doing. I hope it didn't give you nightmare or something.
*A hug for you, when you wake up*
Tiasshy

[zainul]

Very clear statement.
Enjoyed it.

[Tiasshy]

Thank you

[zainul]

Welcome

[Acer]

I think depth is here in your words too.
"So don’t cry if someone else
comes to me, and pulls me up
to stand by his side........."

this stanza contains some powerful words i'd say. Nicely written indeed.

[Tiasshy]

Thank you. This was meant for someone I once loved, and he didn't really appreciate me. It was meant as a warning what I was felling at that time.

[Acer]

My pleasure :-''). I think your warning was powerful for him indeed.