Broken Soul

I hope you enjoy it

 

Broken soul, torn and worn out

     Prisoner inside and out

Shadow of a cold dark past

Grieving angel and outcast

 

Broken soul of porcelain

Canvas overcast and so unclean

Remember how you were in your past days

Bright ray of Sun, pure drop of Rain

 

Wipe away the dust of sorrow

Relight the candle of tomorrow

Stand up, don’t kneel and crawl

Bravely carry on shoulders your heavy world

 

Child in Time and Son of Doom

Exhibition of scars made up of gloom

You wear on face double disguise

One side is happy, the other one constantly cries

 

You make yourself content with screeds

But make them look as if they’re what you need

You never found the place where you belong

You fear Time and people who forget your song

 

Name of God made up of sweat and tears

Heavy icon of those who can listen and hear

Over you Oblivion will never lie

Your name is carved in stones that never die

 

But souls are not made of dimes

Nor of fame and glorious times

They are like turtle doves

They need a pair and live through love

 

Broken Soul go find your love

Find your pair and through life together shove

Look for the soul who can complete your puzzle

And take your time to heal, don’t hustle

 

  

 

Look for the Angel whose eyes will never lie

To whom to give yourself without a blink of eye

The one who has the key your heart’s core to unlock

By your hand, until the end of time, through pain to walk

 

The one who’d never ask for compromises for her whims

But who would gladly follow you even in dreams

Her, who would smile at you every night and every day

And, when in doubts, would help you find the way

 

Her, whose voice gives you the feel you’ll never wilt

And who’d never let you bare a guilt

Her, who can chase away the darkness inside your heart

Who won’t ever again let your reasoning and heart break apart

 

Look for HER – the girl who can turn your shards back into a piece of Sun

Who can bring to life the canvas and reveal your colors one by one

The pair…soul mate….echo…half of a soul so broken

Find her and give your love for so long kept unspoken

 

 

 

Broken soul, worn out and torn

Caged behind a locked up door

Smile when you cry and dry out when you scream

Your life’s a nightmare, not a dream

You are afraid to stand up from the ground

You think to sadness you are bound

But it’s your fault that your hope died

You stopped believing and started downward to fly

And now you find yourself in a precipice so harmful and so endless

Where only your SoulMate could find you and heal you with tenderness.

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is the translation of my poem "Suflet". It wasn't an easy task but i hope i did a good job.I'm looking forward to reading your reviews.

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A masterful undertaking. The description of the pain, sorrow and longing of the Broken Soul is sadly beautiful, truthful and I am empathetic for him/her. The longing and advice you give to find the Soul Mate is a quest so many are on and may be the only answer here. Well written and sublime. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Voice]

Absolutely brilliant. This is a very deep and beautiful poem I love it. It speaks volumes great work�

Voice

[Tamme]

This brought to mind a man from my past, which made it really easy for me to get wrapped up in your words. Your translation pains were not in vein :)

[CharlieO]

Thank you so much for pointing me in the direction of this poem - it is truely beautiful - I really do not know where to begin with my review.
This is so well written - I loved your use of ryhme - well done and it did not sound at all forced. Your diction is again faultless, I really cannot pick out just one or two lines I liked - there were too many - however one which stuck out early on was 'Broken soul of porcelain/Canvas overcast and so unclean' - just a really beautiful image which sounds wonderful.
I think you have dealt successfully with a range of emotions - but you have managed to capture a sense of despair and longing very well. There is a little hope also which is refreshing.
Congrats on this poem - I plan to come back to it and read it all over again - in case there is anything I missed.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

(Perhaps there is a chance then for the jigsaw puzzle I call my heart
to recreate a picture of life, if I could find the missing parts.)

This was truly sad and beautiful at the same time. I related well to the theme. Excellent write.

[Rambling Prose]

A beautifully written expression of the soul's journey through life, in search of, that one true love. I especially love:

"But souls are not made of dimes - Nor of fame and glorious times - They need a pair and live through love - They are like turtle doves - They need a pair and live through love...

The first poem I clicked on to read, was "Suflet" & I quickly clicked out for obvious reasons: I didn't understand a word of it! (giggles). I'm glad that I decided to click on another or I would have missed this one. I look forward to reading more...

Nicely done...

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Masterful. great descripiton of broken soul with pain and sorrow and longing. The emotions bleed through in every line. Amazing write, a favorite.

[vanishing]

Truly Beautiful,
Heartfelt, touching and soothing.
Encouraging, and speaks to the heart
gives all alike a sense of encouragement
to be our brothers keeper.
tremendous thought put into every word
loved it, thanks

[julian3]

This one is actually quite challenging to review - it needs to be read several times, and i will probably come back and read it again after a week or so, to allow time for the deep, complex multiple layers of thought and emotion to settle in my mind. It is a wonderful piece of work, and the various themes of longing, alienation, hope, frustration, pain tempered with strength - these are interwoven like the fibers of cloth on a loom of life. In fact, I even wonder - given the length of the work and the depth of the expression of emotion - if this could be explored, extended and made into several short chapters of verse, a sort of mini-epic... but my thoughts are simply wandering now.
At any rate - very good work. Keep up the fine efforts.

[Celtic Cat]

OH my, Doina. This one hurts me to the core. You could have written it directly to me. With every word I read more and more pain filled my heart and tears filled my eyes. You have no idea how much this piece is so like me. It hurt to read, the emotions and tenderness you give off in this piece is so heartfelt. This is a pure work of genius, with exquisite rhymes (how you do that in translating from Romanian to English is beyond me!) and beautiful painted words. I don't know if a soul mate will heal me....but it sure does seem like it will heal your REAL subject. Excellent work.....it's no wonder this was published. Again...congrats on the publication....and thank you for making me read this today. It is a message I needed to hear. Yes...I must stand up and stop crawling. Love you for sharing this piece with me. I'm faving it.
I was about to pull out the parts that really stood out....but it's impossible. This whole poem is a masterpiece. Excellent isn't big enough of a word, but there I've used it anyway. Much love~~

[Yvonne Heidt]

I would have never guessed that this had been translated. It's a beautiful epic piece that echoed in my soul.

Excellent writing!