Burnt Embers

My memories of you
Are now charred
And marred
As I try to discard
The fact that my heart
Longed for you…
Tried to move on, but it was hard

My thoughts were singed
As I cringed
At the thought of us
Meeting our end
Thus begins the trek down a new path
Away from a battle,
Neither was destined to win

Enshrouded in my cloak
On hot tears I choked
What would provoke you…
This love to revoke
There’s no longer hope
So in darkness,
I was left to grope

When I realized
You were no longer
At my side, I felt a tug at my pride
Dying a little inside
Till I surmised…
Why should I hide…
I’ve got pride, Yes, I’ve got pride

So what was once…
My offering of surrender
You insufficiently rendered,
Based on my gender, so now..
If any thoughts you remember
You missed out on my forest of splendor
The smoke now clear…

All you’ll see is burnt embers

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Great flow of emotions.. simply sooo sad.. life is such though.. not everyone gets what they want.. and some have to fight really hard to get their ultimate goals in life.. for me that would be happiness.. and being surrounded by the people I love..I too have known your feelings.. more than once so I can relate.. thank you so much for sharing!!! =)

[WildRose]

The poem flows wonderfully.

I could almost smell something burning, very vivid descriptions.


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[Wunderlich]

This has an amazing flow to it. Very nicely written. Great word choice, and you conveyed the emotions very well. Awesome poem.

[BABSIE BEE]

Strong emotions here. Smouldering stuff !! Great. Thanks
BBXX

[DC Gentleman]

This was indeed an emotional poem.. I love the "forest of splendor" line. Vivid imagery.. smoking poem.. (literally)