Heartbreak

It's hard to tell your mind to stop loving someone, if your heart still does.

Heartbreak.

your words stumble and fall

and suddenly

you're down on your knees

clutching at the gaping

bullet wound,

 

through your heart.

You thought he loved you

but you were wrong.

Because you were up all night

thinking.

But he couldn't care less

about the likes of you.

You know when it's bad

when you can't get out of

bed.

And the food on your plate

is dull and boring

feeling the pounding in your head.

But it will get better

they say

but you shake your head.

For you do not want to feel better

if feeling better is without him,

instead.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Those three finishing lines say it all.. tis the quandary of staying together yet alone or.. flying free but.. still held by your heart-strings.

You write so well, emotions open to the air, exposing your every nerve. What to say about the situation is perhaps secondary.. who knows, you are a true poet who could write about a dirty puddle yet still make it intensely beautiful.

[Brittany Bostic]

So true. Heartbreak is one of those terrible things that cannot be remedied. I love the power behind the piece and how the visuals are used to show the reader the pain that is experienced from a broken heart.

[Mehameha]

Powerful piece. I could see this scene vividly and the details of the room, the bed, even the lighting and smells. You included little clues, yet the anguish and hopelessness filled in the rest. I will be reading more.

[Caitlin]

Awh, thank you! That put a smile on my face :)
I've read some of your work too and I was incredibly impressed. You have a real talent there, hun. All the best x

[Mehameha]

Thanks, it only comes out if I trust it, then Babaam. the spirit writes something I never could have done.