The True Enemy

Very good, indeed. Very engaging, and i can't wait to read more.

Posted 12 Years Ago

So. Freakin. Good

I think that you are off to a great start and that I really admire your characters. I think that your style is great and that the way you have the two main characters have different personalities are great friends. (opposites attract i guess) This is really good. The only thing I would change is just go over your first couple of paragraphs in the fourth chapter. It's alittle draggish but it was still interesting.

Keep up the good work mate :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I think it's going well. I like this a lot. I also like how we keep changing the persepective between Jarred and Sklyer

Posted 12 Years Ago