You Are My Daughter

My Daughter

 

 

 

 

You are of me every filament

You are everything I will never be

You have never let me down and

     have always lifted me up higher

You are strong in your spirit of life

     but tangibly not as most are.

I am of you every filament

I am everything you will never be

I have never wanted to let you down

     but the day will come when I do

I am not as strong as you in spirit

     but tangibly I am more than most.

I am determined to see to it that I

     do not lose you

You are determined to see to it that you

     will not give up

I am the voice of reason and logic

You are the voice of hope and faith.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most beautifully-stated messages I've read about a father-daughter relationship. Here's what makes your tribute especially appealing: You do not place yourself above your daughter, or she above you. I love the way you present each of your strengths, yet without any hidden tones of comparison or judgment. Your message uplifts you BOTH in separate & unique ways, this being culminated in the last 2 lines which are awesome. Any daughter would be totally blessed to have such a father.

[Robert]

Tis is a very nice and thoughtful review. I really appreciate this.

[Carbon Muse]

Such a beautiful poem ... as families, we complete each other, each with their flaws and each with their respective talents, filling the areas where we lack.

[Robert]

Thank you for reviewing many of my poems and thank you for your insight and thoughts on this piece.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Fabulous, emotive, original poetry with that special sense of delight and style. This is truly my favorite kind of poetic writing. It tickles, it elates, it imagines itself into reality.

[Robert]

I am so glad that you liked it. Thank you for the review and compliment.

[Adam Adams]

Ah ... it's good to back to your work again, Robert!

Well... very beautiful & evocatively magnificent poetry you've come up with that's splashing the beauty - the faith - the glamour of love around the world. Poetically beautiful write. Enjoyed reading it.

[Robert]

Thanks Adams I appreciate the compliment very much.

[viola]

I like this poem, and the concept of how people can compliment each other. I really like how the first two stanzas are parallel.

I wonder, is there a way to make the third stanza fit a little more? You do it in the last two lines--"I am..."then "You are..." Can you do that switch in the first part of the stanza somehow?

That's very fine tuning. It's a beautiful poem.

[Robert]

Thank you for the review Viola.

[Strawberry Evil]

Such a beautiful, lovefilled poem! Even when I don't have chidlren, I can get the feeling in this. I have always been an only child, and lived with just my mother, and this reminds me so much of her words she has ever told me. How much you love your child is touching, fills me with emotions and makes me smile. That's one lucky kido. Good job, as always!

[Robert]

Thank you so much for your very kind review.

[Insight "MH"]

You have shown such conviction and love throw out this elegant piece. Thank you for recommending this.

Insight.

[Robert]

Thank you Insight for the thoughtful review.

[Insight "MH"]

You are mostly welcome.

[Francis Orion]

Very nicely penned poem expressing your love and admiration for your daughter. It's a very beautiful poem. Well done!

[Robert]

Thank you so much Francis.

[Philip Muls]

I can feel your determination to take care of her. She is very different and very valuable to you. Very authentic.

I too have a daughter. My relationship to her is complex. I would love to feel the way you do.

Well done.

Could you read mine, thank you.

[Robert]

Thank you for the review.

[Shei]

lovely dedication to your daughter, beautifully written

[Robert]

Thank you for the review Shei.

[Faith]

Beautiful. I love the honesty, the weakness and yet the commitment to strength. Very nice!

[Robert]

Thank you faith, I'm glad you noticed that while reading it.