You Are My Daughter

My Daughter

 

 

 

 

You are of me every filament

You are everything I will never be

You have never let me down and

     have always lifted me up higher

You are strong in your spirit of life

     but tangibly not as most are.

I am of you every filament

I am everything you will never be

I have never wanted to let you down

     but the day will come when I do

I am not as strong as you in spirit

     but tangibly I am more than most.

I am determined to see to it that I

     do not lose you

You are determined to see to it that you

     will not give up

I am the voice of reason and logic

You are the voice of hope and faith.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most beautifully-stated messages I've read about a father-daughter relationship. Here's what makes your tribute especially appealing: You do not place yourself above your daughter, or she above you. I love the way you present each of your strengths, yet without any hidden tones of comparison or judgment. Your message uplifts you BOTH in separate & unique ways, this being culminated in the last 2 lines which are awesome. Any daughter would be totally blessed to have such a father.

[Robert]

Tis is a very nice and thoughtful review. I really appreciate this.

[ApKWrites]

Great poem filled with love and well written.
Thank ou:)

[Robert]

Thank you for the review and compliment.

[paulina misiewicz]

Lovely father-daughter dialogue, love the way you portray one another. Poem that presents the reader with love and hope you share for each other; achieved in just few sentences. Good job!

[Robert]

Thank you for the review and compliment.

[Lyingwithlions]

Beautiful piece of work. Having a daughter that I'm so proud of and love with no end. I can understand and relate to every word. Thank you for sharing!

[Robert]

Thank you for reviewing and leaving your thoughts.

[Saruwa]

I love this. So beautiful

[Robert]

Thank you so much Sarah.

[Yanina McKnight]

I like the switch between second and first person point of view. The repetition adds emphasis on the strength and hope between you and your daughter. Your writing is personal, which in turn makes your thoughts and ideas very well-grounded and concrete.
Wonderfully written!

-Yanina

[Robert]

Thank you Yanina the review is much appreciated.

[Yanina McKnight]

You're very welcome.

You are very sweet to write about your daughter, I can tell the faith you both share is very strong.

[Pastel Nix]

Having my mom as my reason and logic I can definitely connect to this poem, understanding the thoughts and feelings of a parent. Although I have yet to raise another human being, I have raised beloved pets and that is enough for me to peek into what parenthood is about. I know it is definitely not the same but I have the heart of a mother and I am ready to be one when the timing is right. Beautiful work here, much like the rest of it. Great Job!

[Robert]

Thanks Bina, this piece is special to me and I'm glad I shared it with you to review,

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Ahhh a wonderful piece written with passion, devotion and love.

[Robert]

Thank you for the review and compliments.

[Riv]

Very touching, it's good to see someone taking the time to show their affection in one way or another. A lot of people I've known nower days will only care about themselves. Pen on!

[Robert]

Thanks for your review and thoughts Limno/

[Anand Sehgal]

I am the voice of reason and logic

You are the voice of hope and faith.


very emotive write. Bravo. :) keep up the good work .

[Robert]

Thank you Anand for the review and your thoughts you left.

[Roxie M]

To me, this is a song, sung by two. I like the contrast. Well penned.

[Robert]

Thank you Roxie for the review.