You Are My Daughter

My Daughter

 

 

 

 

You are of me every filament

You are everything I will never be

You have never let me down and

     have always lifted me up higher

You are strong in your spirit of life

     but tangibly not as most are.

I am of you every filament

I am everything you will never be

I have never wanted to let you down

     but the day will come when I do

I am not as strong as you in spirit

     but tangibly I am more than most.

I am determined to see to it that I

     do not lose you

You are determined to see to it that you

     will not give up

I am the voice of reason and logic

You are the voice of hope and faith.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most beautifully-stated messages I've read about a father-daughter relationship. Here's what makes your tribute especially appealing: You do not place yourself above your daughter, or she above you. I love the way you present each of your strengths, yet without any hidden tones of comparison or judgment. Your message uplifts you BOTH in separate & unique ways, this being culminated in the last 2 lines which are awesome. Any daughter would be totally blessed to have such a father.

[Robert]

Tis is a very nice and thoughtful review. I really appreciate this.

[Maja]

Such a lovely write for your daughter. This captures the separation yet one-ness of a parent and a child, and it's evident that there is a hopeful and doting tone in this poem. Sweet! :)

[Robert]

Maja, thank you so much for the kind words.

[Bear]

Yen & Yang, good & evil, male & female, each a reversed reflection of the other, each a balance to the other. As Pat Benatar says Love Is A Battlefield, at least from the sound of your poem this is a bloodless struggle :~) Cool concept, thank you.

[Robert]

Thank you for the review.

[Amber Lily]

What a beautiful reflection from a proud parent! I love how you flipped the poem around and talked about the strengths and weaknesses you both have. But as long as you have each other you will both be strong. A very sweet and loving poem to your daughter :)
Great work.

[Robert]

Thank you so much Amber on reviewing this piece and such a kind review you have given me. I am glad you understood the poem so thoroughly as I had intended. Please send me a read request of some of your work when you have the time.

[Annie Gryphon]

I love how you repeat these lines "I am ..." It has a very special rhythm, like a prayer or like magic spells to keep away the evil.

[Robert]

Thank you so much Annie, I appreciate it.

[Shea McWilliams]

This is a beautiful representation of your relationship with your daughter. Wonderful word choice and descriptions. Great job, Robert. Keep writing!

[Botania]

Bravo! Loved this Robert. You know and understand the human heart can also triumph. Wish we could all explore successes more fully every day.

[Robert]

Thank you for the compliments and that's true I agree.

[Kelsey Rogers]

A beautiful construction of an ever more beautiful relationship. I would tear up if these words were presented to me by a loved one! Great work

[Robert]

Thank you for the really nice compliment

[Emily]

I really like this one!
I feel this sense of caring, like the person in this poem is caring for a another person.
Keep it up!

[Robert]

You have it right, its about my daughter and here struggle wit Cystic Fibrosis,

[Suzy Hazelwood]

So beautifully said! I remember my parents feeling much the same about my brother and I. Children can have an amazing life changing effect. Lovely to see this tribute to a wonderful daughter!

[Robert]

Thank you so much for the kind review.

[Alfred Kukitz]

......and quite a lovely daughter at that. You write this piece with an entanglement that reflects the exquisite relationship you have with your daughter. I envy fathers who really love their offspring.

As solid as the Rock of Gilbrata!

Regards,
Al

[Robert]

Thank for the kind compliments.