Waking Up

This is a pretty vague, could-mean-anything sort of poem. There was a definite source of inspiration, but the final product seems to have little to do with it. Still; enjoy!

Waking up,

It’s a brand new day.

We’re free, at last, to love and play.

To see the world as we see fit,

To free ourselves from all of this.

 

But is it worth it? Shall it last?

Or will emotions draw us to past?

Waking up, we saw the light.

Waking up, to return to night.

 

The hatred, the anger, brings unrest.

Someone always feels oppressed.

The sleep that comes is broken and shallow,

And waking up is far from mellow.

 

Waking up, in dead of night.

Waking up, to feel the fright.

This new day will succumb to the old,

It’s inevitable, or so we’re told.

Author's Note

This was written for the 500 words group. Enjoy, peeps!

Reviews

[r]

Since this is your featured poem and it's been posted since October, I should have read this by now, but apparently I'm stupid and haven't read it yet. I've clicked on it before and realized I hadn't read it, but never got around to actually reading it. WELL NOW I HAVE. :D ....finally.

I love this. I like the feel of it and the way the words sound in my mind. I love the 'waking up' part, and especially the part about 'waking up is far from mellow'. The words you use a brilliant and really fit. Not too sure what to say about it other than I really enjoyed the rhyming used. It's really interesting. I luff it.(:

[ericdeben]

Wow, this was pretty good. I can't think of any criticism for it. Keep it up :)

[Leah Natalie]

AWESOME

[Hotwater]

One day we may wake up to reality... there again..

Good write!
*bird*

[Fabric Pulse]

Ah. The struggles of letting go and finding better as we move on. It's a journey memorable with all the bumps. It's all about learning and I think you described it how you honestly felt it to be, you can't ask for much else with a writer.

[Sydney Evans]

This really is incredible. It makes me think and has great emotion.

[Beth Wilcox]

I love this. Very well written and very wise chose of vocabulary you have chosen. I loved this very much, and this poem has much truth behind it.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like it it makes me think of a couple getting back together after a break-up, but then letting the past renew itself .. this is just my interpretation.. i enjoyed the poem it is one to think on.

Chloe

[stellasautelle]

Nicely written :)

[TAO]

So we are told, indeed. I like where this went, and didn't go. You see the truth for the illusion it is, I think, unless I miss my guess. Well done.