"Judas Under God"

Written for Robin's Contest "RANT" http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Let-It-Out-/14395/

If you could, would you reach out, and let loose  

the suffocating noose? Open your eyes,

to the free sea of salty tears they’ve sold

belied? I’ve taut this neck, burning, seduced   

by abuse. Who will save us from the lies

of prudence they’ve swayed? Rich within con’s gold.

And the spittle, it poured as they bare sign,

raged at creation, which falls by design.

Sacrifice, not suffice, daughters and sons,

wanted for slaughter, seized, to feed their feast;.  

endless supper, there’s no washing of feet.

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun  

to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests   

preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.  

Lend us your hungry, your weak, and your poor,

while we tell them, "We can’t give anymore!"  

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III 

Orate - "Judas Under God"

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

Oh excellent work, Tommy. What form and structure to add to the irony of society's dissolution. I loved the use of internal rhyme in the compact form, so many clever touches:

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun
to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests
preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.

Strong, strong piece.

[Rossen]

Powerful and moving something to be proud of!!! 100/100

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

You get an 'Amen' from me. Nice rantage, Tommy!