"Judas Under God"

Written for Robin's Contest "RANT" http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Let-It-Out-/14395/

If you could, would you reach out, and let loose  

the suffocating noose? Open your eyes,

to the free sea of salty tears they’ve sold

belied? I’ve taut this neck, burning, seduced   

by abuse. Who will save us from the lies

of prudence they’ve swayed? Rich within con’s gold.

And the spittle, it poured as they bare sign,

raged at creation, which falls by design.

Sacrifice, not suffice, daughters and sons,

wanted for slaughter, seized, to feed their feast;.  

endless supper, there’s no washing of feet.

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun  

to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests   

preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.  

Lend us your hungry, your weak, and your poor,

while we tell them, "We can’t give anymore!"  

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III 

Orate - "Judas Under God"

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

Oh excellent work, Tommy. What form and structure to add to the irony of society's dissolution. I loved the use of internal rhyme in the compact form, so many clever touches:

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun
to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests
preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.

Strong, strong piece.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

packs quite a punch of reality to the solar plexus of the dying art of compassion~

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superb..powerhouse of a poem..love it!!!!!!!!!

[Ruth]

And all those who preach do not practice what they do indeed teach! Poignant work sweety....I love this piece! xx

[Jeremy Baker]

Great use of anger to fuel a passionate reverie and unleash such driving imagery and artfully written words. A very enjoyable read! Anger can achieve higher purposes when put to use in this way.

[OT]

gotta love a rant in form and rhyme ha - brilliantly done Tommy - you can always hone in on those rant-worthy emotions and sights! so many great lines in this one - great write here! nice!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very strong prose.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Done well! Bravo!

[The Analog Kid]

Very passionate rant, Tommy. The last two lines are potent: "Lend us your hungry, your week, and your poor,
and we’ll tell them, "We can’t give anymore!"

[Rene Velez]

rich in detail, a profound write Tommy, well done...