"Judas Under God"

Written for Robin's Contest "RANT" http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Let-It-Out-/14395/

If you could, would you reach out, and let loose  

the suffocating noose? Open your eyes,

to the free sea of salty tears they’ve sold

belied? I’ve taut this neck, burning, seduced   

by abuse. Who will save us from the lies

of prudence they’ve swayed? Rich within con’s gold.

And the spittle, it poured as they bare sign,

raged at creation, which falls by design.

Sacrifice, not suffice, daughters and sons,

wanted for slaughter, seized, to feed their feast;.  

endless supper, there’s no washing of feet.

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun  

to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests   

preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.  

Lend us your hungry, your weak, and your poor,

while we tell them, "We can’t give anymore!"  

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III 

Orate - "Judas Under God"

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Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

Oh excellent work, Tommy. What form and structure to add to the irony of society's dissolution. I loved the use of internal rhyme in the compact form, so many clever touches:

Treasonous non-anonymous hearts, spun
to extreme; nuns stand at the pulpit, priests
preaching for leaches, as the birds just tweet.

Strong, strong piece.

[SpokenWord]

I love political pieces. I feel there are so many sides to this. For me I think of healthcare and what happened to me recently and how it made me feel, maybe even changed my political views some. I am still processing it on how I truly feel on the subject now. What I do know is what is happening over seas will happen over here, if we don't change how we live and soon we wont be able to take care of our self not alone anyone else. Times are changing my friend too many people and not enough cheese to go around. Great write as always I have missed your poetry and your political views and your voice for standing up and being heard~

[Crowley]

Now thats poetry....significatnt work with the ultimate disillusioned message. Why you gotta be so s****y and resentful?...lol. Great work my man....you stand up to the test of time T.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a powerful poem. It makes me think of governments not just our own who careless about the poor and the blue collar worker. They turn their backs and pretend they don't exist while stuff their mouths with the finest feast living off the backs of the every day average person who pays their taxes. Well written and thought provoking even if I am wrong.

[FJ Davis]

And blood will ooze from the battered stones.
We have not been giving; they have been taking it from us. Unfortunately, Tommy, most will continue to allow the confiscations.
"Judas Under God" is an effective rant and an excellent poem.

[Lilly Negoi]

beautiful poem Tommy! perfect tone, perfect structure, compact, and words convey perfectly the message! indeed, "we can't give anymore"!

Like :)

[Robin]

the beat of the rant pounding through the heart of this poetic unleashing , excellent work Tommy !

Thank you for entering my contest

[arbitrary jane]

yeah... everyone here has said it, but the cadence of this... it sweeps you up and the internal rhyme and all the metaphors slung at the wall like paint on canvas, one pelting the next and the next.
i like watching you rant.

[blakjassy]

I found this piece unbelievably clever. The flow and rhythm are fantastic, even better when read aloud.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You've tackled some very controversial subjects without a hint of restraint.
This dose of reality is what we need. Sweet work! You've given us a lot to
think about.