“Death or an Ex”

Written for Selene's "Poetry That Doesn't Suck"

  

Born of fire red desire

walk this storming world

setting pyre,

and they try

to extinguish her soul, purpose,

taking the “Elixir of Life,”

opened legs, come and get it,

popping pills, numbing the pain

of their whiskey bent existence,

but the end becomes her,

as she devours whole

heartedly, the mortal fate

of man.

 

Black heart story

fated judgment

it’s not her glory,

we send ourselves to perdition,

she just opens the unknown door,

and pushes, as you drop into that black hole

in your soul. Will it be

a backwards fall? She can’t see

the bottom; gnash your teeth

or sprout some wings, you’re not

her problem anymore.

 

Memories burn an ugly turn

of fate

at some point we’ll all relate

to this reaper who smolders

in my mind, and lingers

in my heart; scythe behind

the spine,

cultivating these thoughts,

igniting the umbrella

of manhood

that used to hold   

back the tears. No one

will rein on her

masquerde, and I feel

 

I’m six feet

under her high heels.  

 

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III

Author's Note

Based on the picture...

Reviews

[Crowley]

This may be the best "f*****g ex" poem ever!!!!!! Oh man the pain, the frustration with them and with yourself for seeming like such a d****e through the whole thing (not you...lol). The clock can't tick fast enough, and the 86' Pacer won't drive far enough to escape these feelings....great work.

[Poetic Beauty]

I still love this piece we would like to keep exes in the past but sometimes the creep back into our minds

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superb!! How did I miss this! You captured the essense of that experience and turned it upsidedown...the ending ..wow ..perfect..

[patricia]

This evoked some powerful emotions in me Tommy.

The first part on that downward slope..so sad and desolate

The second part...very deep, scarey but so wise.

...relate to this reaper who smolders in my mind, and lingers in my heart; scythe behind the spine...This was awesome!

Those last two lines...hurt me.

Thankyou for this astonishing and brilliant write.

[Maya Storm]

I hope that this is not based on true events... "I’m six feet
under her high heels." I am right there with you, it was raw without being whiny and it's even better that it's written from a males' perspective. I am surrounded by girls who think men feel no pain. I liked it... good job.

[Ruth]

Tommy, I don't think I have read a poem about an ex like it! LOL Amazing my talented friend! Simply bloody amazing! If I may be as bold LOL xx

[Aidz]

And 6 feet under is where she will keep you...damm the b***h.....

Kewl write mate

[Rene Velez]

Hey Tommy what's good...yup I have been there, the dreaded X, I will always say it man, you have a gift constructing your words, they play with each other in a way that is seldom seen, nice imagery and great subject matter..

[Robin]

"No one will rein on her masquerade " awesome ! loved your take Tommy

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Good Gawd! What a visual! What last two stanza! Singed my hairs sticking up on my neck. You have some serious skills, my friend. A black hearted woman with a mind aflame. Superb.