"The Seagull"

Written for Kerry's contest, Sunday's Challenge ACT I, based on the play 'The Seagull' by Anton Chekov

Lakeside Gull

by Thomas G. Hopkins III

Lost souls flutter by this mirror faced lake
tracing the image of a love adorned,
but never touched; black velvet veil of mourn.
Life is lonely when affection’s heartache
is alone in the grip of other’s arms,
never found within those grey eyed charms.
 
Melancholy heartfelt folly, ogles roam;
(I can’t read your lips anymore) “Tell me
what you’re saying, symbolize for me, please
this truth of perception you call home?”
Seek the role of fame, relish in its mull,
to fly by the side of a seaside gull...

I will fight for the right to hold her hand!
Duel of chance. Momma says, “No, let it go!
Walk away from the heart this ardor knows
not.” (Lonely feather on a beach of sand)
A rapt relic held in this tired grasp;
we’re locked away in a memory's clasp...

Suicidal death is leery, the tide,
it drew her in just to pull her away,
I don’t have the strength anymore to pray;
hear this seashell soul cry before it dies.
Life is a lonely affection’s heartache,
lost souls flutter by this mirror faced lake...



Published in the Summer Issue of The Single Hound, July 5, 2011
http://www.thesinglehound.com/featured-writers-summer-2011.html

Copyright © 2011, The Single Hound

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III

 

 

Star Performance - "The Seagull"

KERRY'S Sunday Challenge #1 May 22, 2011 - May 28, 2011

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

Beautifully. Such elegant use of language and articulated like a true pro. At parts i found myself lost within the piece but htat took nothing away it just encouraged the rthmic flow of your writing to take it with me.
Layered with romance, love and pain , emptyness and lonliness.. fantastic piece of work.

[Tommy]

Thank you...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Tommy, I can honestly say that you have taken your talent to the next level.
This was just astounding.

"Mirror faced lake"...brilliant...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Love brought for an instant then taken away, this poet's soul cries out to fight when everyone important to him says let it be........well written Tommy

[Poetic Beauty]

This has dark imagery that paints a very sad and heartaching picture or a lost love. The details are stunningly clear.

[Michael X]

Impressive work Tommy, you express the essense in heart and the words form a picture of the meaning, I agree with the reviewers below,
excellent work and a pleasure to plane the existence.

[Emily B]

oh, wonderful!

[emmajoy]

There's a chill, distant atmosphere in these words, as if a great swathe of mist has captured and carried away that beloved other. The following four lines reach into the depths, ' Melancholy heartfelt folly, ogles roam; ~ I can’t read your lips anymore~ “Tell me what you’re saying, symbolize for me, please ~ this truth of perception you call home?” '

[Ruth]

Tommy, you have done it again love....created a sheer masterpiece - the emotion behind this is exhilirating! I think you have surpassed yourself! Seriously beautiful, mouth open......incredible!
xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

and the glaze is captured~ undulating to the tides of hearts bled in inkwells~ this is a beautiful undulating adagio to lost loves~

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Tommy, I need to read more of your brilliant poetry my friend.

[Nobody.]

Bravo Tommy! Really nailed it. I enjoyed every well-crafted line.
Cheers!
R.G.