"My Addiction of Sorrow"

An old piece....

Pleasure

My serenity

An ecstasy which burns

A blissful incise

My method of escape

I induce the devil’s medication

In order to cope

It brings me down

Never too much damage

Just enough to cure

The uproar of apprehension

That begins in my skull

Then corrupts my soul

My addiction of sorrow

Pain

2011 © T.G. Hopkins III

Reviews

[ali]

this poem reminds me of a dull headache feeling i would typically try to drive away with the methods you talk about.... its a good thing though and it's really genuine. you work with words like ecstasy incise and induce which are hard to get a flow with but you pull it off really well.
There are some lines I feel are just filler, I could be wrong though. If you keep them it won't harm the poem but stripping the poem down might make it more raw and dangerous.
thats all i can suggest-- thanks for your suggestions on my poem

[ali]

the lines i was thinking of were "a method of escape" and "corrupts my soul"
They aren't bad or anything i just hear them a lot. but its always up to you. if you feel like you should keep them, you know best

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Sorrowful words yet written well. I understand ... I wish there were another way to release the pain and sorrows. I know many who use this for an outlet for so many troubles.

Chloe

[My Fair Lady]

blissful incise... coping in ways I cannot comprehend. I think I'll stick to writing.. torchering my loyal friends instead.. blissful incise. :)

[Kerry O'Connor]

A powerful poem for the powerless soul.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the body can take so much more pain than the soul~ incisions in flesh distract from incisions shredding spirit~ your poetic bleeds devastation~powerful~

[patricia]

how well I know the feeling...so much so that when I have'nt got any I look around bereft wondering what's missing, your so right it really is an addiction...there was a calmness in your economical use of words and the italics felt like soft lights on tired eyes.

[Magdelena]

Tommy you never seem to stop amazing me with your words. They speak not only volumes, but also such meaningful words that boggle the mind. This was brilliant! A huge WOW on this one..

Mags xx

[Tear]

Very good you have done show not tell very well, the font and colours have added to the imagery. I am a self-harmer so I can relate to this piece. I have done a poem myself called self-harm you may relate too. Well done really like it

[SpokenWord]

This reminds me of a friend I once knew who use to cut herself for the pain that eased her mind in some way. At first it was hard to understand but then once she explained I understood that we all cope with things differently her way was just different than mine. Great write.