"The Seagull"

Written for Kerry's contest, Sunday's Challenge ACT I, based on the play 'The Seagull' by Anton Chekov

Lakeside Gull

by Thomas G. Hopkins III

Lost souls flutter by this mirror faced lake
tracing the image of a love adorned,
but never touched; black velvet veil of mourn.
Life is lonely when affection’s heartache
is alone in the grip of other’s arms,
never found within those grey eyed charms.
 
Melancholy heartfelt folly, ogles roam;
(I can’t read your lips anymore) “Tell me
what you’re saying, symbolize for me, please
this truth of perception you call home?”
Seek the role of fame, relish in its mull,
to fly by the side of a seaside gull...

I will fight for the right to hold her hand!
Duel of chance. Momma says, “No, let it go!
Walk away from the heart this ardor knows
not.” (Lonely feather on a beach of sand)
A rapt relic held in this tired grasp;
we’re locked away in a memory's clasp...

Suicidal death is leery, the tide,
it drew her in just to pull her away,
I don’t have the strength anymore to pray;
hear this seashell soul cry before it dies.
Life is a lonely affection’s heartache,
lost souls flutter by this mirror faced lake...



Published in the Summer Issue of The Single Hound, July 5, 2011
http://www.thesinglehound.com/featured-writers-summer-2011.html

Copyright © 2011, The Single Hound

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III

 

 

Star Performance - "The Seagull"

KERRY'S Sunday Challenge #1 May 22, 2011 - May 28, 2011

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

Beautifully. Such elegant use of language and articulated like a true pro. At parts i found myself lost within the piece but htat took nothing away it just encouraged the rthmic flow of your writing to take it with me.
Layered with romance, love and pain , emptyness and lonliness.. fantastic piece of work.

[Tommy]

Thank you...

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Such a beautiful melancholy write.
Full of longing and loss.. so lovely.
You did this up right!

Chloe

[Rossen]

Left me in awe Tommy, one to read over and again.
This is pure poetry, a gem ~

[arbitrary jane]

beautiful, beautiful poetic expression. you wove the story elements in, but it is a standalone piece nonetheless. and to do all that in the structure of stanza and rhyme... hats off.

[Brianna Brie]

Awl...this has such a feeling of commitment. The kind of commitment to believe in love when everybody else gave up on that person. Like a vow to seek God even when it seems he is not listening. I feel the want, the need, the heartache and the loneliness in this poem. Super job!

[Kerry O'Connor]

Tommy!! You have out-done yourself in this poem - form, rhyme scheme and images to knock my socks off.

This is unrequited love at it's most intimate and painful, expressed most beautifully on every line with parenthetical statements to break the heart.

Thank you so much for entering The Sunday Challenge #1

[Aidz]

Well executed and nicely balanced.. a very kewl scribe Tommy

[Christie Moses]

oh wow....this really moves me in such a soulful way. I felt my heart in my throat by the ending. This is one i can read many many times. REally beautiful writing.

[Robin]

flawlessly executed , stellar writing Tommy

[Rene Velez]

hats off Tommy, you have a way with the word scheme, you use words very well, placed just precisely in a ghostly manner when it comes to this poem...Imagery is wicked.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A polyandrous working of platitudinous and gangrenous reverence, sheer emotion and beauty lay within the wording, great read.