A Comedy In Denial

A Comedy In Denial

We heard the church choir’s

High voices like souls forsaken.

His body wears a mahogany box.

And with the last amen ,

“children rejoice in his ascension!”

And the crowd ripples with giggling.

 

Oh how sad are we!

we can’t contain our smiles.

But when the jesters came

And began to bury the casket

We could hold it in no longer

The entire crowd of clowns and fools

Exploded in genuine laughter.

 

The deceased‘s dearly betrothed

Fell giddily to the floor.

She dyed her wedding dress black

So she could help us mourn.

But even she couldn’t handle it

 And her laughter brought forth tears,

That fell into the pit

And made he feelings clear.  

Reviews

[Into_The_Cosmos]

Like Frieda P said, "and explosion on the page". As always your work fascinates me.

[Deron Alexis]

thanks i'm glad you liked it

[Frieda P]

Holy cats, this is good Deron! Fine line between tears of hysteria and laughter. Human emotions are a tricky thing...you've written it so well. An explosion on the page this one.

[scripted]

Dark yet brilliant!!! I Love how emotion can't be hidden in this poem... I love how creative the beginning of the poem was to bring out the rest of the poem. You know what they say if you don't laugh you cry right. Anyway thank you for sharing, yours truely Dani

[gombeggar]

i would remove the 's from choir's

otherwise very amusing scene u created

[Deron Alexis]

if you don't mind me asking why

[gombeggar]

it doesn't need to be there as far as writing goes...it reads better without

[Deron Alexis]

ok

[Anna]

I like the death and laughter contrast. It really brings out both emotions strongly. it seems like this should be a morbid poem, and it is in a sense. Because there are jesters and clowns at a funeral, but its portrayed in such a way that it seems giddy. Yet still a topic of death. Very unique.

[Deron Alexis]

thanks allot Anna glad you liked it