My Shadow Girl

My Shadow Girl

Where do you go

So all of a sudden?

When I blink you vanish.

I look at your beauty,

 in a crowded room.

And just one blink,

And there’s the back of you,

 heading out the door.

 

You think no one notices.

I see it on your face.

Self inflicted, razor sharp emotions,

The feeling of invisibility,

I’ve seen that before

On cruel true mirrors.

 

But you’re very wrong,

My dear shadow girl.

I’m too afraid to ask your name,

But I know…

 

I know you have a thing for roses,

And your hair

Always fall to the left.

And your eyes and hair

Are the same shade of brown,

a warm and glyphic  colour.

I can tell you hate makeup ,

And never wear fitted clothes.

 

Maybe I’m a shadow

But you don’t have to be

Cause I know you’re there.

Let me get close to you.

Maybe your bed of roses

Is softer than my bed of nails.

Maybe your falling hair,

Hides a broken heart,

Or the caged demons of your past.

 

Maybe I can fix it

Or give the demons something else to do

Besides guarding the frown on your face

And if two shadows

Only make a darker night,

Then maybe we won’t need daylight.

Cause I know you

And your falling rose petals,

Are softer than sunrise.

Maybe all this darkness and ink

Could write something new for us,

A freedom from both our solitudes .

 

 

Reviews

[scripted]

Talk about something filled with emotion! This poem was amazing... I absolutely love your creative thought behind this write. You compared something that is so hidden to a womens emotional connection to being hurt and her having a wall up... I LOVE the poem. Thank you for sharing, Yours truely Danielle

[Deron Alexis]

thanks glad you liked it .It really is one of my better ones

[de_maruf]

fine

[Deron Alexis]

glad you think so

[Into_The_Cosmos]

I love this.. It reminds me of myself. Sounds weird, but true.

"Maybe all this darkness and ink
Could write something new for us,
A freedom from both our solitudes."

I love that part. It's beautiful.

[Deron Alexis]

thanks you're awesome XD

[Lonesome Traveler]

I really like this, makes me think of someone I know, at a time when we were first getting to know each other. Nicely penned (:

[Deron Alexis]

glad it means something thanks for that

[Dalia]

You think no one notices.

I see it on your face.

Self inflicted, razor sharp emotions,

The feeling of invisibility,

I’ve seen that before

On cruel true mirrors.

I can relate to that.
a very sweet emotion I felt in your poem.
very well rhymed as well, loved it .

[Deron Alexis]

thanx i appreciate it

[Dalia]

welcome :)

[The Dreamer]

Maybe all this darkness and ink
Could write something new for us,
A freedom from both our solitudes .

loved those lines
shadow girl - i like the title :) too. even people who wish to be invisible have secret admirers ... liked the way you described everything. :)

[Deron Alexis]

love that you like it

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

Great one Deron , its your best ever !!! i love it
i love every single word of it , Amazing !!!!
well done :)

[Deron Alexis]

thanx but its my best so far ;)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_* check my new ones

[gombeggar]

On cruel true mirrors ...like this line very much

well done aspects of ones self...or an outside interloper's opinions by interpretation...either way it is a nice set of words u put down here

[Deron Alexis]

thank you very much as you know i admire your work its an honor that you read mine

[gombeggar]

much obliged that u like my work...i am never above appreciating another writer (or any artist's)'s work

[N!LoC]

very nice story! in a form of a poem :-)

[Deron Alexis]

thanx

[Fiona Nadine]

This is so beautiful. So many girls walk around thinking nobody notices them or thinks "Wow, she is so beautiful" when she walks by... I know I can relate to that. You show us the details of this girl and you show us the emotions, instead of just writing them out.
I love the last stanza the most. :)

[Deron Alexis]

thanks allot glad it meant something XD

[Fiona Nadine]

you're welcome :)