Nocturnal Again

I shifted the idea of the nocturne concept a bit

Nocturnal Again

It’s typical of our kind

So inharmoniously out of tune

The night is time given to sleep

But it lives in you and me

 

The air is fresher than ever

Ever alive with roses and dews

It sings a song of exhilaration

It hails a storm of animation

And as we join

A song of nature’s glory

A sound of living art

The woodland speaks

Through all our senses

To churn our human hearts

 

It’s true you are you were and will be

Wondrous throughout and forever

But my nocturnal eyes are charmed

To see you as you are

When rendered through the dark

 

Your body through the night

Liquid grace in moonlight

Yes like flows, your form

A river of silver in every step you take

 

You lean to me

Your eyes like glass and gold

Not sure what they see in mine

But you give my night sky a purpose

A cause for my insomnia

 

Like that which is mended

I feel a part of you

Like those who are broken

I wish it were possible

To get ever closer

Than the oneness we thus are

 

And leaning so close

Then we can dance

To the woodland’s symphony

Our hearts, two

Probably one in unison

Yet an octave apart  

 

 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

The first two lines already made me pause...'so harmoniously out of tune' two people who read each other but feel at odds with the rest of the world. Better to come out at night, when you can't be seen. Your eyes are open at this time of night...you see clearly.
It has a beautiful flow to it, except I got tripped over...

'It’s true you are you were and will be' it didn't flow like the rest of your poetry.

Other than that, I thought it perfect'ly lovely.

[Deron Alexis]

thanx yeah it was a bit out of place but i was wingin it XD

[Frieda P]

ha aren't we all? ;-P

[Alex Norman]

Well done, this poem is really nice. I like the structure and rhythm of it, as it gives a smooth flow to the meaningful words. Nice!

[The Dreamer]

yea i can see how you shifted the concept - i guess love makes all nocturnal - sometimes because you are reveling in it and sometimes because it has broken your heart and deprived you of sleep!

[Deron Alexis]

or not sleeping thinking of that person, thanx for the comments

[The Dreamer]

yea that too :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

beautiful one :)

[Deron Alexis]

thank you its allot of wishful thinking in this one